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Old 04-27-2012, 01:38 PM   #1
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I have recently finished my first draft of my personal statement. Anyone willing to constructively criticize it so that I can find out different ways to improve it?
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Old 04-27-2012, 02:10 PM   #2
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SDN isn't really the best place for personal statement critiques. I highly recommend you have some friends, perhaps a few professors, and maybe family members read it through. Get a lot of perspectives on it and different opinions on how to improve it, so that your personal statement will have a much higher chance of appealing to a random adcom person.

Make sure you're careful about whose advice/corrections you get too. Consider all the suggestions you get but take them all with a grain of salt.
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Old 04-27-2012, 02:31 PM   #3
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i'll read it, send me a pm
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Old 04-27-2012, 02:43 PM   #4
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While this thread is active, would anyone mind reading mine really quickly? It's an incredibly rough draft. I just want to know if I'm heading in the right direction.
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Old 04-27-2012, 03:02 PM   #5
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While this thread is active, would anyone mind reading mine really quickly? It's an incredibly rough draft. I just want to know if I'm heading in the right direction.
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Old 04-27-2012, 07:20 PM   #6
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If anyone isn't too shy, I'd love to take a look at someones. I know it is a personal statement but it would be nice to see how other people are laying it out.
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Old 04-27-2012, 07:38 PM   #7
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As someone who already applied (and who isn't really doing much until med school starts), I'm more than happy to help out and read your personal statements - I know how stressful this part of the year is. Just send me a PM.
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Old 04-27-2012, 08:02 PM   #8
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Old 04-27-2012, 08:20 PM   #9
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I would be willing to read someone's. Disclosure of credentials:

I've been called a great writer by quite a few of my professors and got 5's on both the AP Lit and the AP Lang. However, I am not an English major.
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Old 04-27-2012, 09:54 PM   #10
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Hi all,

I was a science writer in college; had my own column in the Features section! Although I wasn't an english major or anything, I would be willing to critique a few personal statements. Don't expect big picture stuff or advice about content, but I can give grammatical advice, help re-word sentences, etc.

Might be easier if you send a particular paragraph that you are having trouble with and any sentence before and after the paragraph (for transition help).

I am just offering!

Good luck to all!

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Old 04-28-2012, 04:31 PM   #12
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Hey everyone, I'll show you mine if you show me yours

err... happy to give a pair of eyes to anyone who'd take a read through of mine. Specifically, I'm having trouble with a finicky conclusion. I feel like my last sentence just peter's off without making the impact or high-end note I'd like to end on.

Any takers? Will PM yall up-thread to gauge interest.

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Send it my way I would be happy to read it!
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Always open to read and give some feedback. Pm me.
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