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Dear Hushcom,
I have been diligently working on my PS, and had some folks give me feedback. I tried not to make my PS all about me, but more about how others experiences shaped who I am, and who I want to be. Here is an excerpt of some advice I was given:
"Your PS started off great, then wavered as you made it more of a written version of a resume; you listed what you did, gave examples of duties, told what you learned, and related it to medicine.
2nd: you tie together art well with helping others. This isn’t directly relevant to medicine though.
What I really wanted was you to talk about how your passion for creating art, helping others, being part of a team, etc. has made you realize that you wanted to be a physician. In the last paragraph, you’re talking about a case you saw and the qualities good physicians have and you want to emulate (you even list them!). But this paragraph really isn’t about you until the last 2 sentences."
I'm really struggling with this whole thing being just about ME. Really tried to focus on what I did for others, but then my "passion" to be physician isn't coming through. I'm not really a passion person, so its feels wrong that I should create this persona. Guess I'm more of an introvert.
What do you think?? Thank you in advance for your opinion on PS.
I actually stopped really reading personal statements some time ago. I scan them to see if there is anything truly remarkable (i.e. weird), but they are incredibly repetitive and frequently of little use. Just write something balanced and reasonably safe that you don't hate.