Advice on this Alcohol IA Write-up?

mu2021

New Member
Jul 28, 2019
10
1
26
Just looking for some thoughts on how this IA explanation reads. Anything I should add, take out, or change?

"In September 2018, I was charged with a complicity and an alcohol policy violation. For the complicity, I was in a room in my dorm where people were drinking, and everyone ended up getting written up. Though I was not drinking, I violated the complicity policy by not leaving the room. As a result, I attended community programming meetings and was reminded that there are ways to meet new people away from alcohol. For the alcohol violation, I came back from a party severely intoxicated. An RA found me, and I ended up spending the rest of the night in the hospital. As a result, I interviewed our alcohol and drug prevention coordinator to write an essay on the effects of acute intoxication on yourself, those around you, and the healthcare professionals that treat you, paid a fine, and took an alcohol education class. I take full responsibility for both violations. I put myself in the situations, broke both the University policy and the law, and had to deal with the resulting consequences. I treat both as wake-up calls and learning experiences. Afterwards, I doubled down on my studies, dedicated more time to volunteering, sought out research opportunities, and have tried to be to most responsible person I can be, with no further incidents."

Thanks
 

monkeyboy157

New Member
Mar 30, 2021
3
0
1
  1. Pre-Medical
Just looking for some thoughts on how this IA explanation reads. Anything I should add, take out, or change?

"In September 2018, I was charged with a complicity and an alcohol policy violation. For the complicity, I was in a room in my dorm where people were drinking, and everyone ended up getting written up. Though I was not drinking, I violated the complicity policy by not leaving the room. As a result, I attended community programming meetings and was reminded that there are ways to meet new people away from alcohol. For the alcohol violation, I came back from a party severely intoxicated. An RA found me, and I ended up spending the rest of the night in the hospital. As a result, I interviewed our alcohol and drug prevention coordinator to write an essay on the effects of acute intoxication on yourself, those around you, and the healthcare professionals that treat you, paid a fine, and took an alcohol education class. I take full responsibility for both violations. I put myself in the situations, broke both the University policy and the law, and had to deal with the resulting consequences. I treat both as wake-up calls and learning experiences. Afterwards, I doubled down on my studies, dedicated more time to volunteering, sought out research opportunities, and have tried to be to most responsible person I can be, with no further incidents."

Thanks
I’m in this same situation. Do you think this incident negatively impacted your chances at being accepted into medical school?
 

YCAGA

Full Member
2+ Year Member
Jun 10, 2017
970
1,764
146
  1. Medical Student
😳 first all the tone of your writing is fairly informal which isn’t how you want to sound in this situation. Anyways, the most glaring thing is you mention you were “severely intoxicated” and spent the night in the hospital. Why would you ever disclose this to a medical school?! This is like triple bad judgement. 1) you got so drunk you had to go to the hospital 2) you got caught by your school 3) you are telling medical schools way too much detail. Honesty is good, but too much honesty is just shooting yourself in the foot. Why not also tell them how many times you threw up that night?

The good news is that alcohol violations due to underage drinking are the lowest severity of any IA and 99% of schools understand getting drunk in undergrad isn’t going to make you fail out of medical school or be a bad doctor. Since 99% of medical students and doctors did that at one point or another…🤡

This can be 3-4 sentences max. I can rewrite it in the morning but hopefully this gives you a good starting point to make some edits…
 
About the Ads

YCAGA

Full Member
2+ Year Member
Jun 10, 2017
970
1,764
146
  1. Medical Student
Also you can’t really say you treat both incidents as a wake up call since presumably they happened on different nights. Sounds like the least effective wake up call ever if you ended up in the hospital after the first wake up call.
 
  • Haha
  • Like
Reactions: 4 users

Monkeymojo

Full Member
May 23, 2020
80
58
76
  1. Pre-Medical
I agree with the above poster and think you are giving away too many red flags for free. I would rework it to just state that you've received two alcohol-related IAs, one for associating with intoxicated individuals inside the dorms and one for returning intoxicated to the dorms and that's like it for the what you did wrong portion of the statement. Why tie words like "severely intoxicated" to yourself if you don't have to.
 
  • Like
Reactions: 1 user

gonnif

Rule One: Take a Breath
10+ Year Member
Jul 26, 2009
23,824
40,396
276
The Big Bad Apple
  1. Non-Student
I agree with the above poster and think you are giving away too many red flags for free. I would rework it to just state that you've received two alcohol-related IAs, one for associating with intoxicated individuals inside the dorms and one for returning intoxicated to the dorms and that's like it for the what you did wrong portion of the statement. Why tie words like "severely intoxicated" to yourself if you don't have to.
Even that is two long. No adcom is going to care that you as a dumb college freshman having alcohol in the dorm.
write TWO sentences. And that is all
 
Last edited:
  • Like
Reactions: 2 users

mu2021

New Member
Jul 28, 2019
10
1
26
Not sure why this post blew up a year later but wanted to provide an update. Applied to 25 schools this cycle, variety of tiers, and received 4 II which turned into an acceptance at a school I am thrilled to be matriculating to in the fall. Reading back, definitely agree that I wrote much more than I needed to and believe the incidents negatively affected my cycle (though I was still successful). It's unfortunate, but straight honesty is NOT the best policy for things like this and I wish I would've put a more favorable twist on what happened,
 
  • Like
Reactions: 1 user

YCAGA

Full Member
2+ Year Member
Jun 10, 2017
970
1,764
146
  1. Medical Student
Not sure why this post blew up a year later but wanted to provide an update. Applied to 25 schools this cycle, variety of tiers, and received 4 II which turned into an acceptance at a school I am thrilled to be matriculating to in the fall. Reading back, definitely agree that I wrote much more than I needed to and believe the incidents negatively affected my cycle (though I was still successful). It's unfortunate, but straight honesty is NOT the best policy for things like this and I wish I would've put a more favorable twist on what happened,
No idea this post got bumped a year later lol. Congrats on the acceptance and I am glad it worked out for you. Hopefully others can learn from this as well
 
  • Like
Reactions: 1 user
About the Ads

Your message may be considered spam for the following reasons:

  1. Your new thread title is very short, and likely is unhelpful.
  2. Your reply is very short and likely does not add anything to the thread.
  3. Your reply is very long and likely does not add anything to the thread.
  4. It is very likely that it does not need any further discussion and thus bumping it serves no purpose.
  5. Your message is mostly quotes or spoilers.
  6. Your reply has occurred very quickly after a previous reply and likely does not add anything to the thread.
  7. This thread is locked.