I don't think I'd be any help. It took me ten months and twenty drafts. I had the rest of my app done, just waiting on the PS. I had two reviews; one loved it, one hated it. Back to square one.
I went to lunch at TCOM with my friend who just started this year, and it dawned on me how badly I wanted this. This was yesterday afternoon. I sat down at my keyboard, deleted my prior draft, and went at it. When I looked it over, it was everything I wanted to say about myself, and I managed to say it with heart and confidence.One edit for spelling and grammar, and I hit 'submit.' No reviews. I don't even think I saved it. This is why I'm reluctant to read yours. It should come straight from your heart without going through my filter. Good luck.