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First of all, oldman is a cool guy for being the first to offer to read personal statements. Great idea.
After reading a lot of essays from this year's applicants, I feel compelled to give some advice since I am coming across the same corrections over and over again. I do not mean to be harsh, only to offer some honesty for you. I hope this helps those who are too shy to send one of us their personal statements.
ESSAY TIPS
In general, DO NOT LOSE YOUR SENSE OF HUMOR. If you didn't have one to begin with, try to acquire one. This idea will be revisited later. Keep reading.
1) Do not tell me how "empathetic" you are. Do not tell me any other personality traits. SHOW me through example what your qualities are. Describe an experience vividly, even a small one, and I can draw my own conclusions based on that experience.
2) Be prepared. Anything mentioned in your essay (even just in passing reference) is fair game for the interview. If you mention your research, KNOW it backwards and forwards and be able to explain it in regular terms without sounding condescending. The people who will be interviewing you will probably not like their egos bruised by a premed who explains his research in a demeaning manner.
3) Instead of speaking in the negative, speak in the positive. ex: instead of "I dislike research" say, "I prefer clinical work."
4) Emphasize both the human component AND the scientific component of being a physician, not just one. If you want to "help people," the logical question would be, "Why not nursing? why not social work? why not law?" All those professionals "help people" (giving lawyers the benefit of the doubt here. )
5) Explain your motivation behind wanting to become a physician. How did you come to this decision? However, only do this if you explored other career paths first. If you have always wanted to be a doctor, this is not necessary to reiterate in your PS.
6) Express your passion for medicine in some way. Be daring. Use words other than 'amazing, incredible' etc. These are everyday words which cannot really encompass the passion you should have for medicine. However, I might be a bit picky here; perhaps it is my writing style, since I tend to be very descriptive/passionate in my writing.
7) If I were on an adcom, I want to know about YOU, not your school, education, MCAT, GPA; even a listing of EC's is not what I want. I can get that from the other parts of the application. Mention anything special about you. Is there anything particularly different about you? Have you traveled? Does your sister have a learning disability that encouraged you to pursue medicine? Things like this should be mentioned if they are personal to you and set you apart from the typical applicant, particularly if these experiences have shaped you or your personality/views in any way.
8) No need to state the obvious. Every EC is a wonderful experience. Instead, tell me how it changed you personally-- how you found out you were wrong about something or how it kicked your butt because it was so hard to connect with someone, but in the end, you did it-- not because of you and your personality, but because the patient allowed you to connect with them. Or maybe you didn't do it-- that's ok too. It is totally acceptable to write about these experiences as well. Elaborate on what you liked/learned, and yes, it is ok to DISLIKE something about your EC's/experiences!! When I described my medical relief trip to Africa, I also mentioned how the heat of 129 degrees without AC or water was unbearable and how difficult it was for me. This honesty is preferable over saying how much every experience is simply "incredible/wonderful."
Show the reader how you have grown as a result of your experiences and mention specific snapshots or scenarios. These bring life to the essay. Giving a summary of your experiences makes me bored and I go back to skimming instead of reading intently.
And finally, again, HAVE A SENSE OF HUMOR! But only if you can manage this without coming across as cheesy or fake. If not, stick to your serious side because adcoms do tend to be on the conservative side. However, if you can manage it, Use it! After reading essay after essay, the one that brings a smile to me will be remembered and will be a breath of fresh air.
Hope this helps and if I have come across as harsh, I don't mean to be. I only intend to be helpful. Anyway, if you have any questions feel free to PM me.
Well, it looks like I have actually found use for that liberal arts degree! Wow!
After reading a lot of essays from this year's applicants, I feel compelled to give some advice since I am coming across the same corrections over and over again. I do not mean to be harsh, only to offer some honesty for you. I hope this helps those who are too shy to send one of us their personal statements.
ESSAY TIPS
In general, DO NOT LOSE YOUR SENSE OF HUMOR. If you didn't have one to begin with, try to acquire one. This idea will be revisited later. Keep reading.
1) Do not tell me how "empathetic" you are. Do not tell me any other personality traits. SHOW me through example what your qualities are. Describe an experience vividly, even a small one, and I can draw my own conclusions based on that experience.
2) Be prepared. Anything mentioned in your essay (even just in passing reference) is fair game for the interview. If you mention your research, KNOW it backwards and forwards and be able to explain it in regular terms without sounding condescending. The people who will be interviewing you will probably not like their egos bruised by a premed who explains his research in a demeaning manner.
3) Instead of speaking in the negative, speak in the positive. ex: instead of "I dislike research" say, "I prefer clinical work."
4) Emphasize both the human component AND the scientific component of being a physician, not just one. If you want to "help people," the logical question would be, "Why not nursing? why not social work? why not law?" All those professionals "help people" (giving lawyers the benefit of the doubt here. )
5) Explain your motivation behind wanting to become a physician. How did you come to this decision? However, only do this if you explored other career paths first. If you have always wanted to be a doctor, this is not necessary to reiterate in your PS.
6) Express your passion for medicine in some way. Be daring. Use words other than 'amazing, incredible' etc. These are everyday words which cannot really encompass the passion you should have for medicine. However, I might be a bit picky here; perhaps it is my writing style, since I tend to be very descriptive/passionate in my writing.
7) If I were on an adcom, I want to know about YOU, not your school, education, MCAT, GPA; even a listing of EC's is not what I want. I can get that from the other parts of the application. Mention anything special about you. Is there anything particularly different about you? Have you traveled? Does your sister have a learning disability that encouraged you to pursue medicine? Things like this should be mentioned if they are personal to you and set you apart from the typical applicant, particularly if these experiences have shaped you or your personality/views in any way.
8) No need to state the obvious. Every EC is a wonderful experience. Instead, tell me how it changed you personally-- how you found out you were wrong about something or how it kicked your butt because it was so hard to connect with someone, but in the end, you did it-- not because of you and your personality, but because the patient allowed you to connect with them. Or maybe you didn't do it-- that's ok too. It is totally acceptable to write about these experiences as well. Elaborate on what you liked/learned, and yes, it is ok to DISLIKE something about your EC's/experiences!! When I described my medical relief trip to Africa, I also mentioned how the heat of 129 degrees without AC or water was unbearable and how difficult it was for me. This honesty is preferable over saying how much every experience is simply "incredible/wonderful."
Show the reader how you have grown as a result of your experiences and mention specific snapshots or scenarios. These bring life to the essay. Giving a summary of your experiences makes me bored and I go back to skimming instead of reading intently.
And finally, again, HAVE A SENSE OF HUMOR! But only if you can manage this without coming across as cheesy or fake. If not, stick to your serious side because adcoms do tend to be on the conservative side. However, if you can manage it, Use it! After reading essay after essay, the one that brings a smile to me will be remembered and will be a breath of fresh air.
Hope this helps and if I have come across as harsh, I don't mean to be. I only intend to be helpful. Anyway, if you have any questions feel free to PM me.
Well, it looks like I have actually found use for that liberal arts degree! Wow!