Anyone care to attack the first draft of my PS?

[Psycho Doctor]

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I really need help...i'm not even sure if I'm approaching this right. If anyone doesn't mind reading a really rough draft, please IM me and I'll send it to you. I'd really appreciate it. Thanks! 😳

 

[Pinkertinkle]

Ill take a quick look see, since many did the same for me, PM it to me.

 

[klinzou]

I'll give it a look too.

 

[morganlefay]

I PM'd you, I'll look at it.

 

[mango6110]

sure, just pm it to me

 

[Psycho Doctor]

thanks everyone; i sent you all PMs and appreciate all the input you can give me.

 

[EvoDevo]

I'll look it over this weekend, if you like.

 

[Freakingzooming]

the more the merrier? send it my way if you need another person to go through it, got seven essays helped revise from others under my belt. hehe.

 

[Ypo.]

Count me in. 🙂

 

[Haybrant]

send it over; lotta people helped me, so just want to give back. I think I have a decent hold on the necessary elements now...

 

[Smyle4Jenn]

Just PM it and I'll review it this weekend.

 

[thegenius]

I'll do it as well! I private messaged you.

 

[subtle1epiphany]

i wouldnt mind giving you a hand in the editing process, especially since others helped me as well, PM me.

 

[Psycho Doctor]

thank you everyone, i really appreciat eyour offer to look at my feeble first attempt. i sent it to everyone who asked and any responses should give me plenty to work on. If anyone else wants to contact me, please do it through my e-mail because I think my PM box is full and I don't have time right now to decipher through them and decide what to delete. Thanks everyone!!

 

[drguy22]

send it to me too..i have all the free time in the WORLD

 

[Ypo.]

Pyschodoctor-I think you gave me the wrong email address-please PM it to me again. I couldn't get through-but have edited your PS.

 

[Psycho Doctor]

Thank you to all who have sent me comments so far....and i know others attempted to but my mail box was full ...opps sorry. 😳

Now how do i handle all the differing comments and approaches? Aside from the obvious gramatical, spelling and typos (the only thing you all agreed on)some say leave it as is; others say eliminate the first paragraph...too weak; some say ehance the first paragraph more and give it more information; some say condense it; someone said to eliminate any mention of God entirely; some say eliminate some comments about my gf; others say talk more about it, and someone said to start with that.

A lot of it I agree with....those who said i show self-doubt are absolutely right and you're right it definitely needs to be eliminated.

It would have been so much easier to rewrite if you all agreed with each other, but i guess that's exactly what would happen with adcoms..some will love it; others will hate it.

Back to the drawing board....

thank you for all the help 😍

 

[jeatmonkey]

Thank you to all who have sent me comments so far....and i know others attempted to but my mail box was full ...opps sorry. 😳

Now how do i handle all the differing comments and approaches? Aside from the obvious gramatical, spelling and typos (the only thing you all agreed on)some say leave it as is; others say eliminate the first paragraph...too weak; some say ehance the first paragraph more and give it more information; some say condense it; someone said to eliminate any mention of God entirely; some say eliminate some comments about my gf; others say talk more about it, and someone said to start with that.

A lot of it I agree with....those who said i show self-doubt are absolutely right and you're right it definitely needs to be eliminated.

It would have been so much easier to rewrite if you all agreed with each other, but i guess that's exactly what would happen with adcoms..some will love it; others will hate it.

Back to the drawing board....

thank you for all the help 😍

hey, I finished .. just need your email addy to send it..

 

[Psycho Doctor]

thanks, check your PM, i just sent it to you