Anyone want to read my personal statement? Feel free to be honest!!

[SunnK11610]

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thanks everyone!
If anyone else wouldn't mind editing my PS I'd be happy to send it to you, just message me!

 

[UndergradGuy7]

Minor grammar mistakes

1. bionic girl". The period goes before the " so bionic girl."

2. .Being different in middle school is never "cool" and at the time my medical .defined. my medical? I think you forgot condition?

 

[MrBeans]

I will just offer some quick suggestions in my skimming.

- Very engaging opening; I like it a lot!
- Some sentences are too long, and could be broken up into two separate sentences
- Check grammar, and punctuations
- Make sure all statements/thoughts are continued and not cut off
- You can correct a lot of short comings by just reading the essay aloud.
- Overall, nice work! 🙂


I would strongly advise you to remove your personal statement from the public boards, as it may be plagiarized! In general, it is very strong and therefore susceptible to someone copying it as their own!

 

[gorrillaunit18]

Can I call you "bionic girl" from now on? 😀

 

[476515678234896]

bad idea to post on a forum

 

[marymatthews]

it seems like its over the character limit... no?

 

[Pr0digy]

Good read; shorten up some of the long sentences, be sure to take out contractions, and watch your sentence structure.

 

[dentalbuzz]

Your statement is about 500+ characters over the limit, but there are several places in your essay that you can condense. I really enjoyed the overall style of your writing, you made good use of imagery and held my interest the entire time. The main things I noticed were grammatical errors and minor issues with the flow of your sentences. After some editing and cleaning up you will have a top notch personal statement.

However, I agree with the other posters, it is dangerous to post your entire statement on a public forum. Your ideas could very easily be stolen. Take it off, and then PM it to members who are dental students or who have already finished their own essays. Good luck.

 

[SunnK11610]

Actually it was supposed to be medical quirks. Do you think conditions sounds better?

Anyone can call me bionic girl, I don't mind a bit.

And what is the character limit? I have not created a profile on AADSAS because it said registration begins on the 3rd (tomorrow). Anyways, it's just a very rough draft and I figured it would need a lot of editing. Thanks everyone for your advice, I really appreciate it!

 

[MrBeans]

Actually it was supposed to be medical quirks. Do you think conditions sounds better?

Anyone can call me bionic girl, I don't mind a bit.

And what is the character limit? I have not created a profile on AADSAS because it said registration begins on the 3rd (tomorrow). Anyways, it's just a very rough draft and I figured it would need a lot of editing. Thanks everyone for your advice, I really appreciate it!

Your welcome!

Advice: Expect the character limit on AADSAS (including spaces) to be a STRICT maximum of 4500.

 

[D3Nt1st]

Your welcome!

Advice: Expect the character limit on AADSAS (including spaces) to be a STRICT maximum of 4500.

It will not allow you to inputany more that 4500 (i had to cut mine to 4498)