I'll take a look.... 🙂 Although it's kind of hard to "critique" a personal statement...Basically, you want it to be a story about you.Who you are and your experiences that have lead you to dentistry. Remember that all the things that make you look good (academics) are in your application already so there's no reason to waste any of the limited characters boasting...Just be honest about who you are and whatever comes out should be good. 🙂