This, OP. You can cut characters without sacrificing content, and IMO paragraph breaks are a must. Huge blocks of text are nauseating.
Look at any adverbs you've used in your statement. If a word ends in "ly" there's a great chance that it's worthless and you could eliminate it without hurting your essay. By way of example, let me say the exact same thing but pollute it with adverbs:
"If a word ends in "ly," there's a really great chance that it's completely worthless and you could definitely eliminate it without actually hurting your essay."
Adverbs are overblown and often redundant--"ran quickly"...running is quick. Just say "ran."
Many adjectives also are unnecessary--"bright red blood"....just say "blood." People know that it's red.