Is this too personal to put on my secondary?

[AntiKarateKid]

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Thanks for your answers! If the mods could delete this please.

 

[0919mmk]

One of the essays for Albany asks you to describe yourself in 1000 characters. I don't want to spend a paragraph putting some generic adjectives about myself and described my aspirations as well as I could in my primary.

So I started off with my experiences getting bullied as the only minority student in my junior highschool and how that memory allowed me to empathize with other students suffering in high school. I then described how it colored my aspirations thereafter with regards to helping people and led me to reading about philosophy and ethics on my own time until I finally found my place in the Sufi poetry of love.

I don't know if something like this is appropriate for my essay. Any thoughts?

This sounds perfect to be honest- sounds like a much more interesting answer than average.

 

[FrkyBgStok]

Uh.....no. That's like "I enjoy reading, working out, eating hot dogs," crap like that. Too personal and they might think, "wow this is awkward."

But that is my opinion which is worthless.

 

[0919mmk]

Uh.....no. That's like "I enjoy reading, working out, eating hot dogs," crap like that. Too personal and they might think, "wow this is awkward."

But that is my opinion which is worthless.

Yeah, I mean you don't want to be too personal, but I am sure that this does not cross that line. This sounds like a thoughtful and revealing answer that really DOES tell them a lot about who the OP is. Go with it - stand out, I think it will work.

 

[xXIDaShizIXx]

This sounds perfect to be honest- sounds like a much more interesting answer than average.

Definitely use it OP.🙂

 

[az6650]

Yeah, I would definitely use the story. It sounds pretty interesting.

 

[V5RED]

Thanks for your answers! If the mods could delete this please.

I hate when people do this.