Personal Statement Advice

[Peter87]

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I have just finished my personal statement and would like some advice on my opening paragraph.
I have an experience when I was in my first year volunteering in a hospital that has really inspired me to pursue a career in healthcare. I would really like to put this experience into my statement, but I don't want the reader to feel like its a battle btw dent and med while reading it.

Let me know what you think.

 

[UCLAzy]

roll the dice. its only your future!

 

[nze82]

I have just finished my personal statement and would like some advice on my opening paragraph.
I have an experience when I was in my first year volunteering in a hospital that has really inspired me to pursue a career in healthcare. I would really like to put this experience into my statement, but I don't want the reader to feel like its a battle btw dent and med while reading it.

Let me know what you think.

Hmmm. I don't think giving the reader such a feeling is necessary a bad thing. In reality, you're making a choice. You could have chosen medicine over dentistry, but your telling your reader that due to the experience you had, you have realized that you'll be more successful if you pursue dentistry. Life is all about making decisions. All they want to know is that you're making an informed decision by choosing dentistry over any other profession.
Good Luck👍