Personal statement help!?

[djsbaseball2014]

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Can anybody read over my PS and provide me with feedback? I am over the character count so offering suggestions to cut down and things would help. I appreciate any feedback

 

[686269]

I need help on mine too! Would you be willing to trade?

 

[jow b.]

I'd be willing to take a look at it