Personal Statement question

[WilliamC93]

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I'm in a pickle.

Across the board, I have good stats. The final part to tackle is my personal statement. I've been working heavily on my personal statement, and I felt like I had something spectacular coming along. Its been drafted about six times now, and the professor, philosophy student, friend's mom, and two of the three pre-health advisers all liked it and how I was paralleling music with dentistry. At this point it is very well written. But then I sent it in to the third pre-health adviser. She has been doing this the longest, and sure her opinion is only one, but she made some good points. She admitted that it is well written, the connections to music are good, and it shows why I'm interested in dentistry, but it completely misses the mark on showing who I am, and why I should be a dentist... and as I read it again, I kinda agree..

Is this going to kill me?

I'm leaving to study abroad in about week and need to get my application in before I go. Though I currebtly don't see how, I can try my best to incorporate what I can into what I have, but I don't really have enough time to 'start over.' However, if its imperative I do so, I'll do my best. Its a huge hit to me too because I've always felt I was a bad writer and I have never been more proud of what I've written.

Honestly any advice any of you have done to write your statement is welcome. Thanks!

 

[dreamgirl300601]

Hi WilliamC93,

I just finished the 2013- 2014 app cycle and will be matriculating into Harvard Med in the fall. I'd be happy to take a look at your statement. Contact me here if you're interested. http://www.fiverr.com///kiab92/crit...=shared&utm_source=twitter&utm_term=&view=gig

 

[Glimmer1991]

In all honesty? After 6 drafts and with multiple peoples' approval, it's probably perfectly fine.

Remember: The perfect is the enemy of the good. (I think that's Voltaire, LOL.)

If it's free of errors, just let it be. I'm sure it is more than sufficient. And, in all honesty, a PS won't really make or break you. Well, actually, I guess it could break you if its REALLY bad... but I can't imagine one "making" an applicant. 🙂

 

[Daneosaurus]

Hey, man, I know I'm being a hypocrite by recommending this, but relax!!!! Your stats are fantastic! Like Glimmer said, a PS will not be a deciding factor unless it's horrible. Worry about telling them who you are in the interviews you are sure to get. Just throw something together, and by your account, you have gone far beyond that. You've got this. Good job, but honestly, you are as a shoo in as I have seen since coming to this board.

 

[WilliamC93]

Thanks for the encouragement! But I sent it to a few more people and they responded all the same. Maybe I changed something critical that threw it from 'personal statement' to 'high school comparison essay.' Regardless, its been completely rewritten with a lot more stories. If y'all think I can get by with a 'good enough' essay, then I think this one is what I'll stick by because it is actually about me.