Vanderbilt Autobiography

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It's the last essay I have to write, and I just don't want to start off with, I was born in ___. I tried to come up with some interesting ways of starting it, and six hours of sitting here, still no success. Any suggestions from all of the good writers (unlike me) out there?

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How about fast-forwarding to some climactic point in your life and then zooming back to how you got there and what happened from then on. Just a thought.
 
You weren't the only one. That took me about two weeks of misery. Try an intro paragraph outlining what you will be explaining.

For example:
I am the sum total of my experiences, family, and blah blah blah. As a result of these I have come to value some things.

Except with a lot more eloquence.
 
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You weren't the only one. That took me about two weeks of misery. Try an intro paragraph outlining what you will be explaining.

For example:
I am the sum total of my experiences, family, and blah blah blah. As a result of these I have come to value some things.

Except with a lot more eloquence.

Yikes! Two weeks? Is a slightly catchy introduction worth getting your secondary in two weeks later? Besides, I feel like "I am the sum total of my experiences, family, blah blah blah" is just how that kind of cliched sentence will read to admissions committee members who see tons of applicants all trying to be original in the same way.

I think there is nothing wrong with "I was born in ____," just make sure you show how your life experiences have made you the excellent medical school candidate you are today. I started my essay pretty much that way and I was still interviewed. If you have to have a catchy intro, go for it. My suggestion, though, is a clear and concise intro and a catchy overall autobiography.
 
Thanks for the help ya'll. One more quick thing, there is something that is pretty important in my life, but I wrote an essay on it already for the diversity one, and talked about it in my PS. should I just make a quick reference to it and hope that whoever is reading my file is reading all of my essays? I don't want to over kill it, but don't want to neglect it either. Thanks!
 
I would write about it in the autobiography. You might not dwell on it quite as long as you would have if it were not in the other essay, but if it is as important as it sounds you should not leave it out.
 
Here was my auto intro, think of it what you will:

" I have a theory that if you give a girl a boy's name, you're just asking for trouble. My grade-school friend, Alex, once painted black spots on her poodle, because she wanted a Dalmatian. Kris, my bus-buddy, once attacked her mom's pool party with tampon "grenades". Me, I used to ferret out all of my dad's cigarettes, and hide them in the garbage disposal. You can't really blame my parents though since they weren't the ones who named me Sam. They let the Powandas, the couple who helped my dad immigrate to America, choose my English name. Since they had a Sam in every generation but mine, they bequeathed the title to me, and perhaps doomed my parents to a decade or so of tomboy shenanigans."



Being a tomboy did a lot to the early development of my social interactions and my views on the world, lol. And I thought it'd be a fun opening. I feel obliged to make my autobiography at least somewhat entertaining since if I were an admissions reader, I'd just pass out after reading 10 autobiographies that were all dry, serious, and emotionally/intellectually heavy. But that's just my approach. Good luck!

And no worries, the auto did have points that showed my values and motivations towards medicine...etc 🙂 It wasn't all fluff.
 
that's an awesome intro! I wish I were that creative. I just went with the story of how my mom was on a ski trip, broke her arm and then found out at the hospital that she was four months pregnant with me... whatever, after trying to write that thing for 2 week I said "well I already have the interview and three other damn good essays... what's one bad one going to hurt?" well, we will see if it hurts I guess
 
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