Adversity/Challenge Essay: feedback welcome :)

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Hello everyone,

I'm hoping to receive feedback on my adversity/challenge, as I'm having a hard time to choose. As a non-trad from middle-income family, I'm fortunate to have parental support throughout my life. Health has been great so far and only child, so my parents and I have a close bond. Rest of my extended family are overseas. Apologies in advance for a lengthy post. Here are my ideas:

1. Entering into undergrad and graduate school as the only person from my friend's group: Long story short, I'm going with a "structure as shackles" vibe. The challenge/adversity situation is that I originally felt lonely and depressed by being the only person that I know in a large room/group setting. I can also relate to the fact that I had been bullied in elementary school. However, I've grown by standing up for myself (being my own advocate), adopting a new mindset/perspective, where rather than focusing on the fact that I'm lonely, I have a new opportunity to expand my social circle and a fresh start. Similarly, when working as a peer mentor for incoming local and international students to adopt a similar mindset. Relevance: I'm a Canadian applying to MD program in the States, so I have experience transitioning to new environments and as a hopeful student in their institution, will look forward to being a peer mentor for future incoming students.

2. Fundraising for the Royal Canadian Air Cadets: The challenge/adversity situation is that because we have a military-like uniform, we are often mistaken as a militaristic organization. Thus, through the public-facing fundraising events, while I have met WWII veterans and their families, I have been berated countless times by the public due to this bias. I've grown by being able to explain to people with polarizing perspectives about our organization's purpose of instilling leadership values to teens and understanding why they have their own biases. Relevance: As a hopeful medical student, I'll interact with colleagues who have different opinions and these experiences (over 6 years) give me the foundation to maintain a cooperative environment focused on shared decision making.

3. Ph.D. research (learning how to do animal microsurgeries): The challenge/adversity situation is that I'm not very good with my hands, anatomy confused me, I became anxious when blood entered into the field of view and learning to do surgeries coincided with a period of time where I had to prepare to transfer into the PhD program (i.e. doing other experiments, reading literature, writing proposals etc). So, it was difficult to balance/manage priorities. I've grown by being able to balance time and identifying how I learn best (i.e. visual person, so I recorded the surgery video, so I can review frame by frame, along with drawing the anatomy to learn better; doing surgeries on dead animals (or cadavers)). I'm now proficient with this technique, a lot better dealing with hands and accustomed to seeing blood. Relevance: As a hopeful medical student, I might need to revamp my learning strategies. Furthermore, as I want to have an educator role, my experiences have allowed me to help others explore and improve their learning strategies.

4. Mistakenly disposing of biopsy samples when I worked in a histology lab: The challenge/adversity situation is that I was a hospital volunteer who naively threw away cassettes containing patient biopsy samples, which understandably caused a lot of grief in the histology lab. I was subsequently fired from the position and had my volunteering privileged take away from me. I've grown by owning up to my mistakes, creating a concrete action plan for improving myself and learning to openly accept criticism from peers and mentors. Also, the lab staff was very supportive (seeing my sincerity) in welcoming me back and letting me help them again. Relevance: In my future medical career, I'll likely and unfortunately make mistakes as a student, resident and sometimes as an attending physician, so it is important to learn from my mistakes. As a hopeful preceptor, it is key to forgive others when appropriate and help them learn from their mistakes. It touches on the student-teacher relationship, which aligns with the goals of becoming a doctor and educator.

@Goro, @gonnif, @LizzyM, @Catalystik, @gyngyn, what do you think? To other SDNers, I hope to receive feedback from you too! Feel free to tear me a new one!
 

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Frankly, most adcoms are not going to have heard of the Royal Canadian Air Cadets. If they Google, they'll learn that it is an organization funded by Canada's National Defence so it is not only militaristic, it is a youth group funded by the military. Don't misrepresent the organization you have been involved with and then say you want to foster a cooperative environment with shared decision-making. That's disingenuous.
 
@gonnif , thanks for your feedback. Being bullied in elementary was not a pleasant experience, however, it taught me to stand up for myself (in a non-violent way), to seek out resources and personnel support. But, with this experience, I felt more able to support others going through a tough time now (as a peer mentor). But, my concern is that since I'm a non-trad and I discuss something about me in elementary school, it is going to be too far back in time.

@LizzyM , I don't mean to sound disingenuous or misrepresent the organization I belonged to. If looking at the mission, it says, "The Air Cadet League of Canada is a civilian, non-profit, community-based and volunteer-led organization that in collaboration with the Department of National Defence and our other partners, is dedicated to supporting the objectives of the Royal Canadian Air Cadet program" and "To promote and encourage the nation’s youth to develop and maintain an interest in aviation, leadership and citizenship, in partnership with the Canadian Armed Forces and other organizations". I don't mean to get into a war of words, but my main point is that when I dealt with the public back then, a lot of them think we recruit youth to the military, which is an incorrect belief. Because we are a non-profit organization, the money/funding has to come from somewhere, which is where the misunderstandings start. How do you recommend I communicate these points across in my essay, as I don't want to mislead the Adcoms?
 
I would suggest that you not use the Royal Canadian Air Cadets at all. Canadian Cadet Organizations - Wikipedia
Wikipedia describes it a a Quasi-Military Youth Orgnization. Describing arguments you had with members of the public about the military or non-military nature of your organization is not going to go well for you. And you'll be talking to Americans who aren't familiar with the organization and will get their information as I did, from Google.
 
Hello @LizzyM , @Goro , @gonnif , thank you for your excellent feedback! I'll follow gonnif's and Lizzy's advice by avoiding the cadet topic and proceed by talking about my childhood experiences, linking it to my life and explaining how I've grown and matured.

I'd be walking through a lot of blunders if not for these conversations, as I used similar prompts for all schools! You saved me a lot of grief 🙂
 
Hey, I posted in another thread but didn't get a response, so I wanted to post here. I didn't want to make a new challenge essay thread, so I thought I should just add here. Could any of you let me know what you think of these topics for a challenge?

1. It basically boils down to:
I ran into a problem at work, and I asked someone outside of my immediate lab for help.

I was having issues with a machine I was working on. Ever since working there, I networked a lot and got to know people in other labs. Because of these connections I made, I was able to get help from another lab. I was invited to visit the other lab so they could show me how to ameliorate the problem. I also checked in with someone in my lab about this, and he gave me the okay to go to this other lab and watch. I didn't get help from him initially, because he wasn't someone who normally worked with that machine. I also didn't ask my higher up boss, because I realized that it would be more efficient in terms of time to go to someone else. He worked in a separate building, so he would have to schedule aside a whole day to come over and try to figure out the problem with me. I recognized that asking someone else in the immediate vicinity would be better.

My reflection is seeing the benefit of making connections with others in the workplace. I could also say something about learning to do what's best for the lab (not wasting my the boss's time when I could get the help more quickly from someone else)

Not sure if this is a poor example. I am having trouble figuring out how I can expand more on the reflection.

2. My truck got towed for being in the wrong parking spot. I was never notified about it, so I was able to fight the fee due to negligence on part of the towing company. The towing was a matter of confusion, because the parking lot owner had told me to move to the new spot, but apparently they hadn't informed the towing company this. I didn't document the conversation about the changed spot, so the lesson I took away from this was to properly document everything. I've realized how this extends to other aspects of life (reading everything you sign, all contracts, loans, housing lease, being always aware of what you're getting yourself into).

3. Interpersonal conflict with lab staff. The senior members of the lab were hoarding supplies, and newer members had limited access. I tried to ameliorate the problem by buying new supplies and designating it as communal. This didn't work. The issue didn't get fixed, but I got experience in an authoritarian work environment. The older members wanted things done a certain way, and I learned that in that situation, you shouldn't try to change the way things are done. It was a good experience working in an environment different from what I was used to. With this one, I don't want to put the authoritarian lab in a negative light, because I realize that work environments vary in their cultures. I've realized how important it is to ask current members about the lab to get a sense of the culture before joining.
 
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