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XXX###H = HALF YEAR = 0.5 CREDIT
XXX###Y = ONE YEAR = 1.0 CREDIT
100 = FIRST YR
200 = SECOND YR... UP TO 400
1000 = MASTER DEGREE
University of Toronto
2001 Fall - 1st Year Studies in Life Sciences - Erindale College

Sessional GPA 1.70 Cumulative GPA 1.70
(C-)BIO152H5 Evolution
Credits Earned: 0.50


2002 Winter
Sessional GPA 3.33 Annual GPA 3.14 Cumulative GPA 3.14
(C-)BIO153H5 Diversity
(B+)CHM140Y5 Matter & Transformations
(B+)MAT138Y5 Calculus
(A)PHY135Y5 General Physics
(A-)STA107H5 Introduction to Probability
Credits Earned: 4.00


2002 Summer - 1st Year Studies in Life Sciences - Erindale College
Sessional GPA 2.00 Cumulative GPA 3.03
(C)GGR252H1 Marketing Geography
Credits Earned: 0.50


2002 Fall - Bachelor's Degree Program - New College
Sessional GPA 2.35 Cumulative GPA 2.92
(A-)CHM220H1 Phys Chem Life Sci
(D)ENG215H1 Can Short Story
Credits Earned: 1.00


2003 Winter - Bachelor's Degree Program - New College
Sessional GPA 2.95 Annual GPA 2.83 Cumulative GPA 2.93
(B-)BCH242Y1 Biochemistry
(B+)BIO250Y1 Cell & Molecular Bio
(A-)CHM247H1 Intro Organic Chem II
(D+)GGR254H1 Geography USA
(B+)MAT235Y1 Calculus Sci II
Credits Earned: 4.00


2003 Summer - Bachelor's Degree Program - New College
Sessional GPA 3.70 Cumulative GPA 3.00
(A-)PSL302Y1 Intro Human Physiol
Credits Earned: 1.00


2003 Fall - Bachelor's Degree Program - New College
Sessional GPA 2.50 Cumulative GPA 2.96
(D+)BCH335H1 Nucleic Acids
(A-)CHM347H1 Org Chem Biol Compds
Credits Earned: 1.00


2004 Winter - Bachelor's Degree Program - New College
Sessional GPA 2.83 Annual GPA 2.75 Cumulative GPA 2.93
(C+)BCH340H1 Proteins
(B+)BCH371H1 Biochemistry Lab
(B)EAS120Y1 Mod Std Japanese I
(B-)MGB311Y1 Molecular Biology
Credits Earned: 3.00


2004 Summer - Bachelor's Degree Program - New College
Sessional GPA 3.70 Cumulative GPA 2.98
(A-)ANA300Y1 Human Anat Histol
Credits Earned: 1.00


2004 Fall - Bachelor's Degree Program - New College
Sessional GPA 3.00 Cumulative GPA 2.98
(B)BCH422H1 Cell Surface Biochem
(B)BCH441H1 Bioinformatics
Credits Earned: 1.00


2005 Winter - Bachelor's Degree Program - New College
Sessional GPA 3.05 Annual GPA 3.04 Cumulative GPA 2.99
(B)BCH426H1 Signals in Metabol
(B-)BCH440H1 Protein Biosynthesis
(C+)BCH471Y1 Advanced Laboratory
(A)PSL498Y1 Physiol Research
Credits Earned: 3.00


2005 Fall - Non-degree(Prev. A&Sc Degree) - New College
Sessional GPA 4.00 Cumulative GPA 3.02
(A)MGY377H1 Microbiology I
Credits Earned: 0.50


2006 Winter - Non-degree(Prev. A&Sc Degree) - New College
Sessional GPA 3.70 Annual GPA 3.85 Cumulative GPA 3.03
(A-)MGY378H1 Microbiology II
Credits Earned: 0.50


2006 Summer - Non-degree(Prev. A&Sc Degree) - New College
Sessional GPA 2.00 Cumulative GPA 3.01
(C)ENG100H1 Effective Writing
Credits Earned: 0.50


School of Graduate Studies
2006 Fall - Master of Science - Department of Physiology
(B)PSL1034H ADV TOPS: METABOLIC DISORDERS


2007 Winter - Master of Science - Department of Physiology
(A)JYG1555H ADV TPS: CELL&MOL NEUROBIOLOGY


PERSONAL STATEMENT
1. Why I became interested in Dentistry
I first became interested in dentistry in the last year of my undergraduate studies. While contemplating my future, my mind became flooded with memories, specifically of middle school and high school years. "Ouch!" As I cried out in pain due to the injection of local anesthesia. I have been visiting dentists many times for my cavities and dental accidents in the past. The treatment itself appears to be scary at first, but turns out rewarding at the end. I have received one dental implant and several root canals and filling treatments, as well routine scaling to prevent cavity from forming. Every time after the treatment, I feel thankful to the dentist who treated me. These visits to the dentists imprinted a positive, non-erasable experience toward dentists and set a cornerstone in me for wanting to become one during my senior years in university. I hope one day I could become one of them, to relieve people who are suffering from toothache and prevent their tooth from cavity and falling apart.
2. Suitability based on professional and academic background
In order to prepare myself for the field of dentistry, I have become active in volunteering at hospitals as well as in a dental clinic run by Dr. Po-Fong Yang. Through those experiences, I have learned about what caring for other people means. As a volunteer, I have witnessed the painful situations they need to go through during treatments. I have learnt basic knowledge of dental anatomy and progression of gum disease as Dr. Yang is a periodontist. In addition, I have learnt to develop films, witnessed dentist-patient interaction and some dental procedures, as well, understood several daily routine procedures in maintaining a dental clinic. Academically, I achieved a reasonable GPA of 3.0 in the specialty of biochemistry. To improve my chance of acceptance as the competition for entry got harder and harder these days, I enrolled myself in graduate studies in physiology where I focused my research on molecular neuroscience and generated a publication in both The Journal of Neuroscience and The Journal of Biological Chemistry as a coauthor this year. Furthermore, I have obtained a DAT score of 21. Outside school, I applied myself in church's children ministry and served children in worship since 2002. Starting last September, I have shifted my role to teaching children's Sunday school. Besides church service, I have just started to volunteer teaching university level chemistry this January as I am always enthusiastic in chemistry and willing to share my knowledge to those who need help with it.
3. Reasons for choice
I am attracted to the externship opportunities offered by your school. I feel my training as a dentist would best take place at a school that encourages a model of community service at the heart of its program. As a dentist, my priority is to serve the community, especially the underserved and the impoverished. These opportunities would more than prepare me for a career in dentistry.
4. Intended contributions to dentistry
A mission trip to Saskatoon's native reserves has opened up my mind as to how I can apply the skills I will learn from dental school to serve the people in need. . Presently, I intend to become a general dentist and devote myself in a private setting for about ten to eleven months per year. The remaining one month, I hope to visit the Amazon region in South America to do clinical volunteering. This would further enrich my experience as a dentist whose mission is to serve humanity. In order to get a concrete glimpse of my dream, I teamed up with Dr. Simon Lin, an orthodontist, this year as a volunteer dental assistant to help with teeth extraction and scaling in underserved areas of Brazil.
5. Conclusion
To be accepted into your dental program would be the first step in a life-long journey of serving humanity. It is my hope that you will thoroughly consider my application.


Awards, Honors, Scholarships
Determination to Succeed BY EarlHaigSecondary School IN June 1997
Class Citizenship BY EarlHaigSecondary School IN June 1997


Work Experience (including Military Service)




Dr. Shuzo Sugita
Master student
Research focused on syntaxin. A t-SNARE protein. The goal is to knock-down syntaxin in PC12 cells, and expect functional defects in neurotransmitter release.
1480 Hrs
September 2006

Dr. Po-Fong Yang
Dental assistant
Saliva suction, chart filling, film development, equipment cleaning, equipment autoclave and wrapping, chair cleaning after treatment
48 Hrs
May 2005-June 2005

Dr. Shuzo Sugita
Lab Technician
Research on the mechanism of neurotransmitter release. Specifically focused on both CAPS and syntaxin. Two proteins crucial for vesicle fusion with the plasma membrane.
1720 Hrs
July 2005-May 2006

Dr. Shuzo Sugita
Lab Technician
Research on the mechanism of neurotransmitter release. Specifically focused on both CAPS and syntaxin. Two proteins crucial for vesicle fusion with the plasma membrane.
320 Hrs
July 2006-August 2006


Extracurricular/Volunteer/Community Service
TorontoWesternHospital
Volunteer
Meet new patients and help them with registration and directions.
58 Hrs
July 2005-July 2005

Dr. Po-Fong Yang
Dental assistant
Saliva suction, chart filling, film development, equipment cleaning, equipment autoclave and wrapping, chair cleaning after treatment
44 Hrs
May 2005-May 2005

Dr. Simon Lin
Dental assistant
Medical mission in Brazil (near Corumba and Cuiaba). Cleaning of equipments, set up of equipments, and perform scaling to the poor and needy.
70 Hrs
June 2007-June 2007


Research Experience
Dr. Shuzo Sugita
TorontoWesternHospital
Master student
Research focused on syntaxin. A t-SNARE protein. The goal is to knock-down syntaxin in PC12 cells, and expect functional defects in neurotransmitter release.
1480 Hrs
Received Academic Credit
Paid position
September 2006

Dr. Shuzo Sugita
TorontoWesternHospital
Project Student
Research on the mechanism of neurotransmitter release. Specifically focused on the protein CAPS. I worked as a fourth year undergraduate project student.
130 Hrs
Received Academic Credit
September 2004-April 2005

Dr. Shuzo Sugita
TorontoWesternHospital
Lab Technician
Research on the mechanism of neurotransmitter release. Specifically focused on both CAPS and syntaxin. Two proteins crucial for vesicle fusion with the plasma membrane.
1720 Hrs
Paid position
July 2005-May 2006


DAT
Nov 2006
Reading Comprehension:20
Biology:21
Chemistry:22
Science Total:21
Academic Average:21
PAT:20
Chalk Carving:16


Dentistry Experience

Dr. Po-Fong Yang
Dental assistant
Saliva suction, chart filling, film development, equipment cleaning, equipment autoclave and wrapping, chair cleaning after treatment
44 Hrs
Volunteer
May 2005-May 2005

Dr. Po-Fong Yang
Dental assistant
Saliva suction, chart filling, film development, equipment cleaning, equipment autoclave and wrapping, chair cleaning after treatment
48 Hrs
Paid
May 2005-June 2005

Dr. Simon Lin
Dental assistant
Medical mission in Brazil (near Corumba and Cuiaba). Cleaning of equipments, set up of equipments, and perform scaling to the poor and needy.
70 Hrs
Volunteer
June 2007-June 2007
 
TRANSCRIPT
University of Toronto
2001 Fall - 1st Year Studies in Life Sciences - Erindale College
Sessional GPA 1.70 Cumulative GPA 1.70

Crs Code Title Wgt Mrk Grd CrsAvg
BIO152H5 Evolution 0.50 60 C- C-
CHM140Y5 Matter & Transformations 1.00 IPR
MAT138Y5 Calculus 1.00 IPR
PHY135Y5 General Physics 1.00 IPR

Credits Earned: 0.50


2002 Winter - 1st Year Studies in Life Sciences - Erindale College
Sessional GPA 3.33 Annual GPA 3.14 Cumulative GPA 3.14

Status: In good standing

Crs Code Title Wgt Mrk Grd CrsAvg
BIO153H5 Diversity 0.50 61 C- D+
CHM140Y5 Matter & Transformations 1.00 78 B+ D+
MAT138Y5 Calculus 1.00 78 B+ D+
PHY135Y5 General Physics 1.00 87 A C+
STA107H5 Introduction to Probability 0.50 80 A- C-

Credits Earned: 4.00


2002 Summer - 1st Year Studies in Life Sciences - Erindale College
Sessional GPA 2.00 Cumulative GPA 3.03

Status: In good standing

Crs Code Title Wgt Mrk Grd CrsAvg
GGR252H1 Marketing Geography 0.50 63 C C+

Credits Earned: 0.50


2002 Fall - Bachelor's Degree Program - New College
Sessional GPA 2.35 Cumulative GPA 2.92

Crs Code Title Wgt Mrk Grd CrsAvg
BCH242Y1 Biochemistry 1.00 IPR
BIO250Y1 Cell & Molecular Bio 1.00 IPR
CHM220H1 Phys Chem Life Sci 0.50 83 A- B-
ENG215H1 Can Short Story 0.50 54 D C+
MAT235Y1 Calculus Sci II 1.00 IPR

Credits Earned: 1.00


2003 Winter - Bachelor's Degree Program - New College
Sessional GPA 2.95 Annual GPA 2.83 Cumulative GPA 2.93

Status: In good standing

Crs Code Title Wgt Mrk Grd CrsAvg
BCH242Y1 Biochemistry 1.00 72 B- B-
BIO250Y1 Cell & Molecular Bio 1.00 78 B+ B-
CHM247H1 Intro Organic Chem II 0.50 80 A- C
GGR254H1 Geography USA 0.50 58 D+ C+
MAT235Y1 Calculus Sci II 1.00 77 B+ C

Credits Earned: 4.00


2003 Summer - Bachelor's Degree Program - New College
Sessional GPA 3.70 Cumulative GPA 3.00

Status: In good standing

Crs Code Title Wgt Mrk Grd CrsAvg
PSL302Y1 Intro Human Physiol 1.00 83 A- C+

Credits Earned: 1.00


2003 Fall - Bachelor's Degree Program - New College
Sessional GPA 2.50 Cumulative GPA 2.96

Crs Code Title Wgt Mrk Grd CrsAvg
BCH335H1 Nucleic Acids 0.50 58 D+ B-
BCH371H1 Biochemistry Lab 0.50 IPR
CHM347H1 Org Chem Biol Compds 0.50 80 A- C+
EAS120Y1 Mod Std Japanese I 1.00 IPR
MGB311Y1 Molecular Biology 1.00 IPR

Credits Earned: 1.00


2004 Winter - Bachelor's Degree Program - New College
Sessional GPA 2.83 Annual GPA 2.75 Cumulative GPA 2.93

Status: In good standing

Crs Code Title Wgt Mrk Grd CrsAvg
BCH340H1 Proteins 0.50 68 C+ B-
BCH371H1 Biochemistry Lab 0.50 78 B+ B+
EAS120Y1 Mod Std Japanese I 1.00 75 B B-
MGB311Y1 Molecular Biology 1.00 70 B- B-

Credits Earned: 3.00


2004 Summer - Bachelor's Degree Program - New College
Sessional GPA 3.70 Cumulative GPA 2.98

Status: In good standing

Crs Code Title Wgt Mrk Grd CrsAvg
ANA300Y1 Human Anat Histol 1.00 83 A- C

Credits Earned: 1.00


2004 Fall - Bachelor's Degree Program - New College
Sessional GPA 3.00 Cumulative GPA 2.98

Crs Code Title Wgt Mrk Grd CrsAvg
BCH422H1 Cell Surface Biochem 0.50 74 B C+
BCH441H1 Bioinformatics 0.50 74 B B
BCH471Y1 Advanced Laboratory 1.00 IPR
PSL498Y1 Physiol Research 1.00 IPR

Credits Earned: 1.00


2005 Winter - Bachelor's Degree Program - New College
Sessional GPA 3.05 Annual GPA 3.04 Cumulative GPA 2.99

Status: In good standing

Crs Code Title Wgt Mrk Grd CrsAvg
BCH426H1 Signals in Metabol 0.50 73 B B
BCH440H1 Protein Biosynthesis 0.50 72 B- B-
BCH471Y1 Advanced Laboratory 1.00 68 C+ B
PSL498Y1 Physiol Research 1.00 85 A A-

Credits Earned: 3.00


2005 Fall - Non-degree(Prev. A&Sc Degree) - New College
Sessional GPA 4.00 Cumulative GPA 3.02

Crs Code Title Wgt Mrk Grd CrsAvg
MGY377H1 Microbiology I 0.50 86 A C+

Credits Earned: 0.50


2006 Winter - Non-degree(Prev. A&Sc Degree) - New College
Sessional GPA 3.70 Annual GPA 3.85 Cumulative GPA 3.03

Status: In good standing

Crs Code Title Wgt Mrk Grd CrsAvg
MGY378H1 Microbiology II 0.50 81 A- C+

Credits Earned: 0.50


2006 Summer - Non-degree(Prev. A&Sc Degree) - New College
Sessional GPA 2.00 Cumulative GPA 3.01

Status: In good standing

Crs Code Title Wgt Mrk Grd CrsAvg
ENG100H1 Effective Writing 0.50 66 C B-

Credits Earned: 0.50


School of Graduate Studies

2006 Fall - Master of Science - Department of Physiology
Crs Code Title Wgt Mrk Grd CrsAvg
PSL1034H ADV TOPS: METABOLIC DISORDERS 0.50 B
RST9999Y RESEARCH/THESIS 0.00 IPR


2007 Winter - Master of Science - Department of Physiology
Crs Code Title Wgt Mrk Grd CrsAvg
JYG1555H ADV TPS: CELL&MOL NEUROBIOLOGY 0.50 A
RST9999Y RESEARCH/THESIS 0.00 IPR



PERSONAL STATEMENT
1. Why I became interested in Dentistry
I first became interested in dentistry in the last year of my undergraduate studies. While contemplating my future, my mind became flooded with memories, specifically of middle school and high school years. "Ouch!" As I cried out in pain due to the injection of local anesthesia. I have been visiting dentists many times for my cavities and dental accidents in the past. The treatment itself appears to be scary at first, but turns out rewarding at the end. I have received one dental implant and several root canals and filling treatments, as well routine scaling to prevent cavity from forming. Every time after the treatment, I feel thankful to the dentist who treated me. These visits to the dentists imprinted a positive, non-erasable experience toward dentists and set a cornerstone in me for wanting to become one during my senior years in university. I hope one day I could become one of them, to relieve people who are suffering from toothache and prevent their tooth from cavity and falling apart.
2. Suitability based on professional and academic background
In order to prepare myself for the field of dentistry, I have become active in volunteering at hospitals as well as in a dental clinic run by Dr. Po-Fong Yang. Through those experiences, I have learned about what caring for other people means. As a volunteer, I have witnessed the painful situations they need to go through during treatments. I have learnt basic knowledge of dental anatomy and progression of gum disease as Dr. Yang is a periodontist. In addition, I have learnt to develop films, witnessed dentist-patient interaction and some dental procedures, as well, understood several daily routine procedures in maintaining a dental clinic. Academically, I achieved a reasonable GPA of 3.0 in the specialty of biochemistry. To improve my chance of acceptance as the competition for entry got harder and harder these days, I enrolled myself in graduate studies in physiology where I focused my research on molecular neuroscience and generated a publication in both The Journal of Neuroscience and The Journal of Biological Chemistry as a coauthor this year. Furthermore, I have obtained a DAT score of 21. Outside school, I applied myself in church's children ministry and served children in worship since 2002. Starting last September, I have shifted my role to teaching children's Sunday school. Besides church service, I have just started to volunteer teaching university level chemistry this January as I am always enthusiastic in chemistry and willing to share my knowledge to those who need help with it.
3. Reasons for choice
I am attracted to the externship opportunities offered by your school. I feel my training as a dentist would best take place at a school that encourages a model of community service at the heart of its program. As a dentist, my priority is to serve the community, especially the underserved and the impoverished. These opportunities would more than prepare me for a career in dentistry.
4. Intended contributions to dentistry
A mission trip to Saskatoon's native reserves has opened up my mind as to how I can apply the skills I will learn from dental school to serve the people in need. . Presently, I intend to become a general dentist and devote myself in a private setting for about ten to eleven months per year. The remaining one month, I hope to visit the Amazon region in
South America to do clinical volunteering. This would further enrich my experience as a dentist whose mission is to serve humanity. In order to get a concrete glimpse of my dream, I teamed up with Dr. Simon Lin, an orthodontist, this year as a volunteer dental assistant to help with teeth extraction and scaling in underserved areas of Brazil.
5. Conclusion
To be accepted into your dental program would be the first step in a life-long journey of serving humanity. It is my hope that you will thoroughly consider my application.



Awards, Honors, Scholarships
Determination to Succeed
EarlHaigSecondary School
June 1997
Class Citizenship
EarlHaigSecondary School
June 1997


Work Experience (including Military Service)



Employer
Position Title
Brief Desc
Tot Number of Hrs
Start Date
End Date
Dr. Shuzo Sugita
Master student
Research focused on syntaxin. A t-SNARE protein. The goal is to knock-down syntaxin in PC12 cells, and expect functional defects in neurotransmitter release.
1480
September 2006

Dr. Po-Fong Yang
Dental assistant
Saliva suction, chart filling, film development, equipment cleaning, equipment autoclave and wrapping, chair cleaning after treatment
48
May 2005
June 2005
Dr. Shuzo Sugita
Lab Technician
Research on the mechanism of neurotransmitter release. Specifically focused on both CAPS and syntaxin. Two proteins crucial for vesicle fusion with the plasma membrane.
1720
July 2005
May 2006
Dr. Shuzo Sugita
Lab Technician
Research on the mechanism of neurotransmitter release. Specifically focused on both CAPS and syntaxin. Two proteins crucial for vesicle fusion with the plasma membrane.
320
July 2006
August 2006


Extracurricular/Volunteer/Community Service



Organization
Position Title
Brief Desc
Tot Number of Hrs
Start Date
End Date
TorontoWesternHospital
Volunteer
Meet new patients and help them with registration and directions.
58
July 2005
July 2005
Dr. Po-Fong Yang
Dental assistant
Saliva suction, chart filling, film development, equipment cleaning, equipment autoclave and wrapping, chair cleaning after treatment
44
May 2005
May 2005
Dr. Simon Lin
Dental assistant
Medical mission in Brazil (near Corumba and Cuiaba). Cleaning of equipments, set up of equipments, and perform scaling to the poor and needy.
70
June 2007
June 2007


Research Experience



Principal Investigator
Location of Research Project
Position Title
Brief Desc
Tot Number of Hrs
Position Type
Start Date
End Date
Dr. Shuzo Sugita
TorontoWesternHospital
Master student
Research focused on syntaxin. A t-SNARE protein. The goal is to knock-down syntaxin in PC12 cells, and expect functional defects in neurotransmitter release.
1480
Received Academic Credit
Paid position

September 2006

Dr. Shuzo Sugita
TorontoWesternHospital
Project Student
Research on the mechanism of neurotransmitter release. Specifically focused on the protein CAPS. I worked as a fourth year undergraduate project student.
130
Received Academic Credit
September 2004
April 2005
Dr. Shuzo Sugita
TorontoWesternHospital
Lab Technician
Research on the mechanism of neurotransmitter release. Specifically focused on both CAPS and syntaxin. Two proteins crucial for vesicle fusion with the plasma membrane.
1720
Paid position
July 2005
May 2006


DAT
Nov 2006
Reading Comprehension:

20
Biology:

21
Chemistry:

22
Science Total:

21
Academic Average:

21
PAT:

20
Chalk Carving:

16


Dentistry Experience



Name of supervisor
Position Title
Brief Desc
Tot Number of Hrs
Position Type
Start Date
End Date
Dr. Po-Fong Yang
Dental assistant
Saliva suction, chart filling, film development, equipment cleaning, equipment autoclave and wrapping, chair cleaning after treatment
44
Volunteer
May 2005
May 2005
Dr. Po-Fong Yang
Dental assistant
Saliva suction, chart filling, film development, equipment cleaning, equipment autoclave and wrapping, chair cleaning after treatment
48
Paid
May 2005
June 2005
Dr. Simon Lin
Dental assistant
Medical mission in Brazil (near Corumba and Cuiaba). Cleaning of equipments, set up of equipments, and perform scaling to the poor and needy.
70
Volunteer
June 2007
June 2007

everything looks great except for ur GPA.
Of course, you cant erase ur first semesters in college so i suggest taking more science classes as part of your masters to compensate.
Again, everything else is very impressive
best to you,
dan
 
you application looks complicated. is there anyway you can simplify it for us?
 
your personal statement sounds like a letter of interest.
Is this what u submitted to AADSAS?
 
You have a good transcript. Like the post above, your GPA is the low point of your application, but I think those classes you took during graduate school and your extra-curricular activities should make up for it.
Now tell me, how was your medical mission in brazil? (not because Im from there lol)
 
I would suggest that you brush up your application and personal statement in terms of grammar and spelling, e.g., "Cleaning of equipments, set up of equipments, and perform scaling to the poor and needy". This is just a small, but probably quite important, improvement.

Good luck!
 
you application looks complicated. is there anyway you can simplify it for us?

Hey! I got it all fixed for you.. hope it's easier to understand now
 
You have a good transcript. Like the post above, your GPA is the low point of your application, but I think those classes you took during graduate school and your extra-curricular activities should make up for it.
Now tell me, how was your medical mission in brazil? (not because Im from there lol)

Great mission!! Especially you get to practice scaling without a license.. haha:laugh: it's rather remote and the dental station is set on the roof of our tour ship.. so only limited patients can be admitted onboard at a time (don't wanna sink the ship..) most of them patients are have severe dental caries and extraction is the only option for most of them... (it's like tribes we're visiting..)
If you like crocodiles.. and fish piranha... it's the best place to be.. heard it only take minutes for these fish to consume a cow...
that's the first week of the trip..

second week we moved inland.. and changed place daily.. less fun.. but we get to stay in hotel 😉
these patients are more civilized.. and less severe dental caries.. mostly towns (not like tribes..)
 
TRANSCRIPT
XXX###H = HALF YEAR = 0.5 CREDIT
XXX###Y = ONE YEAR = 1.0 CREDIT
100 = FIRST YR
200 = SECOND YR... UP TO 400
1000 = MASTER DEGREE
University of Toronto
2001 Fall - 1st Year Studies in Life Sciences - Erindale College

Sessional GPA 1.70 Cumulative GPA 1.70
(C-)BIO152H5 Evolution
Credits Earned: 0.50


2002 Winter
Sessional GPA 3.33 Annual GPA 3.14 Cumulative GPA 3.14
(C-)BIO153H5 Diversity
(B+)CHM140Y5 Matter & Transformations
(B+)MAT138Y5 Calculus
(A)PHY135Y5 General Physics
(A-)STA107H5 Introduction to Probability
Credits Earned: 4.00


2002 Summer - 1st Year Studies in Life Sciences - Erindale College
Sessional GPA 2.00 Cumulative GPA 3.03
(C)GGR252H1 Marketing Geography
Credits Earned: 0.50


2002 Fall - Bachelor's Degree Program - New College
Sessional GPA 2.35 Cumulative GPA 2.92
(A-)CHM220H1 Phys Chem Life Sci
(D)ENG215H1 Can Short Story
Credits Earned: 1.00


2003 Winter - Bachelor's Degree Program - New College
Sessional GPA 2.95 Annual GPA 2.83 Cumulative GPA 2.93
(B-)BCH242Y1 Biochemistry
(B+)BIO250Y1 Cell & Molecular Bio
(A-)CHM247H1 Intro Organic Chem II
(D+)GGR254H1 Geography USA
(B+)MAT235Y1 Calculus Sci II
Credits Earned: 4.00


2003 Summer - Bachelor's Degree Program - New College
Sessional GPA 3.70 Cumulative GPA 3.00
(A-)PSL302Y1 Intro Human Physiol
Credits Earned: 1.00


2003 Fall - Bachelor's Degree Program - New College
Sessional GPA 2.50 Cumulative GPA 2.96
(D+)BCH335H1 Nucleic Acids
(A-)CHM347H1 Org Chem Biol Compds
Credits Earned: 1.00


2004 Winter - Bachelor's Degree Program - New College
Sessional GPA 2.83 Annual GPA 2.75 Cumulative GPA 2.93
(C+)BCH340H1 Proteins
(B+)BCH371H1 Biochemistry Lab
(B)EAS120Y1 Mod Std Japanese I
(B-)MGB311Y1 Molecular Biology
Credits Earned: 3.00


2004 Summer - Bachelor's Degree Program - New College
Sessional GPA 3.70 Cumulative GPA 2.98
(A-)ANA300Y1 Human Anat Histol
Credits Earned: 1.00


2004 Fall - Bachelor's Degree Program - New College
Sessional GPA 3.00 Cumulative GPA 2.98
(B)BCH422H1 Cell Surface Biochem
(B)BCH441H1 Bioinformatics
Credits Earned: 1.00


2005 Winter - Bachelor's Degree Program - New College
Sessional GPA 3.05 Annual GPA 3.04 Cumulative GPA 2.99
(B)BCH426H1 Signals in Metabol
(B-)BCH440H1 Protein Biosynthesis
(C+)BCH471Y1 Advanced Laboratory
(A)PSL498Y1 Physiol Research
Credits Earned: 3.00


2005 Fall - Non-degree(Prev. A&Sc Degree) - New College
Sessional GPA 4.00 Cumulative GPA 3.02
(A)MGY377H1 Microbiology I
Credits Earned: 0.50


2006 Winter - Non-degree(Prev. A&Sc Degree) - New College
Sessional GPA 3.70 Annual GPA 3.85 Cumulative GPA 3.03
(A-)MGY378H1 Microbiology II
Credits Earned: 0.50


2006 Summer - Non-degree(Prev. A&Sc Degree) - New College
Sessional GPA 2.00 Cumulative GPA 3.01
(C)ENG100H1 Effective Writing
Credits Earned: 0.50


School of Graduate Studies
2006 Fall - Master of Science - Department of Physiology
(B)PSL1034H ADV TOPS: METABOLIC DISORDERS


2007 Winter - Master of Science - Department of Physiology
(A)JYG1555H ADV TPS: CELL&MOL NEUROBIOLOGY


PERSONAL STATEMENT
1. Why I became interested in Dentistry
I first became interested in dentistry in the last year of my undergraduate studies. While contemplating my future, my mind became flooded with memories, specifically of middle school and high school years. "Ouch!" As I cried out in pain due to the injection of local anesthesia. I have been visiting dentists many times for my cavities and dental accidents in the past. The treatment itself appears to be scary at first, but turns out rewarding at the end. I have received one dental implant and several root canals and filling treatments, as well routine scaling to prevent cavity from forming. Every time after the treatment, I feel thankful to the dentist who treated me. These visits to the dentists imprinted a positive, non-erasable experience toward dentists and set a cornerstone in me for wanting to become one during my senior years in university. I hope one day I could become one of them, to relieve people who are suffering from toothache and prevent their tooth from cavity and falling apart.
2. Suitability based on professional and academic background
In order to prepare myself for the field of dentistry, I have become active in volunteering at hospitals as well as in a dental clinic run by Dr. Po-Fong Yang. Through those experiences, I have learned about what caring for other people means. As a volunteer, I have witnessed the painful situations they need to go through during treatments. I have learnt basic knowledge of dental anatomy and progression of gum disease as Dr. Yang is a periodontist. In addition, I have learnt to develop films, witnessed dentist-patient interaction and some dental procedures, as well, understood several daily routine procedures in maintaining a dental clinic. Academically, I achieved a reasonable GPA of 3.0 in the specialty of biochemistry. To improve my chance of acceptance as the competition for entry got harder and harder these days, I enrolled myself in graduate studies in physiology where I focused my research on molecular neuroscience and generated a publication in both The Journal of Neuroscience and The Journal of Biological Chemistry as a coauthor this year. Furthermore, I have obtained a DAT score of 21. Outside school, I applied myself in church's children ministry and served children in worship since 2002. Starting last September, I have shifted my role to teaching children's Sunday school. Besides church service, I have just started to volunteer teaching university level chemistry this January as I am always enthusiastic in chemistry and willing to share my knowledge to those who need help with it.
3. Reasons for choice
I am attracted to the externship opportunities offered by your school. I feel my training as a dentist would best take place at a school that encourages a model of community service at the heart of its program. As a dentist, my priority is to serve the community, especially the underserved and the impoverished. These opportunities would more than prepare me for a career in dentistry.
4. Intended contributions to dentistry
A mission trip to Saskatoon's native reserves has opened up my mind as to how I can apply the skills I will learn from dental school to serve the people in need. . Presently, I intend to become a general dentist and devote myself in a private setting for about ten to eleven months per year. The remaining one month, I hope to visit the Amazon region in South America to do clinical volunteering. This would further enrich my experience as a dentist whose mission is to serve humanity. In order to get a concrete glimpse of my dream, I teamed up with Dr. Simon Lin, an orthodontist, this year as a volunteer dental assistant to help with teeth extraction and scaling in underserved areas of Brazil.
5. Conclusion
To be accepted into your dental program would be the first step in a life-long journey of serving humanity. It is my hope that you will thoroughly consider my application.


Awards, Honors, Scholarships
Determination to Succeed BY EarlHaigSecondary School IN June 1997
Class Citizenship BY EarlHaigSecondary School IN June 1997


Work Experience (including Military Service)




Dr. Shuzo Sugita
Master student
Research focused on syntaxin. A t-SNARE protein. The goal is to knock-down syntaxin in PC12 cells, and expect functional defects in neurotransmitter release.
1480 Hrs
September 2006

Dr. Po-Fong Yang
Dental assistant
Saliva suction, chart filling, film development, equipment cleaning, equipment autoclave and wrapping, chair cleaning after treatment
48 Hrs
May 2005-June 2005

Dr. Shuzo Sugita
Lab Technician
Research on the mechanism of neurotransmitter release. Specifically focused on both CAPS and syntaxin. Two proteins crucial for vesicle fusion with the plasma membrane.
1720 Hrs
July 2005-May 2006

Dr. Shuzo Sugita
Lab Technician
Research on the mechanism of neurotransmitter release. Specifically focused on both CAPS and syntaxin. Two proteins crucial for vesicle fusion with the plasma membrane.
320 Hrs
July 2006-August 2006


Extracurricular/Volunteer/Community Service
TorontoWesternHospital
Volunteer
Meet new patients and help them with registration and directions.
58 Hrs
July 2005-July 2005

Dr. Po-Fong Yang
Dental assistant
Saliva suction, chart filling, film development, equipment cleaning, equipment autoclave and wrapping, chair cleaning after treatment
44 Hrs
May 2005-May 2005

Dr. Simon Lin
Dental assistant
Medical mission in Brazil (near Corumba and Cuiaba). Cleaning of equipments, set up of equipments, and perform scaling to the poor and needy.
70 Hrs
June 2007-June 2007


Research Experience
Dr. Shuzo Sugita
TorontoWesternHospital
Master student
Research focused on syntaxin. A t-SNARE protein. The goal is to knock-down syntaxin in PC12 cells, and expect functional defects in neurotransmitter release.
1480 Hrs
Received Academic Credit
Paid position
September 2006

Dr. Shuzo Sugita
TorontoWesternHospital
Project Student
Research on the mechanism of neurotransmitter release. Specifically focused on the protein CAPS. I worked as a fourth year undergraduate project student.
130 Hrs
Received Academic Credit
September 2004-April 2005

Dr. Shuzo Sugita
TorontoWesternHospital
Lab Technician
Research on the mechanism of neurotransmitter release. Specifically focused on both CAPS and syntaxin. Two proteins crucial for vesicle fusion with the plasma membrane.
1720 Hrs
Paid position
July 2005-May 2006


DAT
Nov 2006
Reading Comprehension:20
Biology:21
Chemistry:22
Science Total:21
Academic Average:21
PAT:20
Chalk Carving:16


Dentistry Experience

Dr. Po-Fong Yang
Dental assistant
Saliva suction, chart filling, film development, equipment cleaning, equipment autoclave and wrapping, chair cleaning after treatment
44 Hrs
Volunteer
May 2005-May 2005

Dr. Po-Fong Yang
Dental assistant
Saliva suction, chart filling, film development, equipment cleaning, equipment autoclave and wrapping, chair cleaning after treatment
48 Hrs
Paid
May 2005-June 2005

Dr. Simon Lin
Dental assistant
Medical mission in Brazil (near Corumba and Cuiaba). Cleaning of equipments, set up of equipments, and perform scaling to the poor and needy.
70 Hrs
Volunteer
June 2007-June 2007

For EC part and dental experience, I see some redundancy there. Is that how we fill out application? I haven't done mine yet, so i am curious😀
 
I would suggest that you brush up your application and personal statement in terms of grammar and spelling, e.g., "Cleaning of equipments, set up of equipments, and perform scaling to the poor and needy". This is just a small, but probably quite important, improvement.

Good luck!

any examples on how to do it?
 
Your personal statement has some typos and some grammatical errors, but it's nothing that can't be fixed.
 
"I am attracted to the externship opportunities offered by your school. I feel my training as a dentist would best take place at a school that encourages a model of community service at the heart of its program. As a dentist, my priority is to serve the community, especially the underserved and the impoverished. These opportunities would more than prepare me for a career in dentistry."

How many schools is this generic statement being sent to?
 
any examples on how to do it?

Ask someone to edit your application, whether it be a counsellor at your school's career centre or a friend. I find reading statements or sentences out loud sometimes helps to clear up confusion with respect to grammar.

Actually, the career centre at UofT has counsellors to help you with grad school applications. I had my personal statement critiqued there when I was applying to my Masters program.
 
Ask someone to edit your application, whether it be a counsellor at your school's career centre or a friend. I find reading statements or sentences out loud sometimes helps to clear up confusion with respect to grammar.

Actually, the career centre at UofT has counsellors to help you with grad school applications. I had my personal statement critiqued there when I was applying to my Masters program.

thanks! :idea:
 
"I am attracted to the externship opportunities offered by your school. I feel my training as a dentist would best take place at a school that encourages a model of community service at the heart of its program. As a dentist, my priority is to serve the community, especially the underserved and the impoverished. These opportunities would more than prepare me for a career in dentistry."

How many schools is this generic statement being sent to?

14 schools
 
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