K, so I have my MCAT tomorrow, and every single time I have to write an essay for the writing section, I'm keep running into the problem of finishing too early. So, can you guys tell me what to improve on with my essays? Here's one example, that I finished just now..
Successful politicians are motivated more by practical considerations than by moral values.
Politicians exist to improve the society as they deal with a variety of problems that exist in the society. Before being in the position to make certain decisions, however, they need to be elected. Therefore, the success of politicians begins with their victory in election. In order to do that, they need to persuade the citizens to vote for them. In the process of campaigning, they devise various ways to appeal to their citizens - one of which is making practical implications in their speech. Since the role of politicians is to improve the society by solving its problems, citizens are likely to pay attention to remarks that consist of practical considerations that can solve various problems. Hence, politicians who make such claims are likely to be elected, signifying the starting point of their successful career as politicians.
However, there are instances in which successful politicians may be motivated by moral values than by practical considerations. Several decades ago, there was a time in which South Korea where it was economically stable. Due to that stability, people were being lazy and during the time of election, Senator Kim had a slogan that promoted people to be diligent. His campaign awoke the society as a whole, invoking people to be diligent and work harder even in times of prosperity. He easily won his election and made decisions that furthered the prosperity of South Korea.
Therefore, the condition of the society is crucial in determining the motivations of successful politicians. If the society has lots of problems with which the citizens suffer, politicians should be motivated by practical considerations, seeking to amend the problems in the society. However, if the society does not have many problems, which is less often than the former scenario, then politicians may be motivated by moral values, promoting certain values as diligence as they campaign and encourage citizens to apply those values to their lives.
Quick Question: In the first paragraph, I really don't have to given an example, right? (since I just have to explain what the prompt means...) Also, do I have to define every single term? - "successful", "practical", "moral values" or is what I did sufficient for that paragraph?
Thank you so much you guys! 🙂
update - finished another one...this one took about 12 min!
A person's first priority in life should be financial security.
Although humans are driven by different motivations to achieve their goals in lives, there is a similarity among this range of differences: financial security. Since living a life accompanies a need to buy commodities that are necessary to sustain the life itself, money is crucial in sustaining or even improving one's lifestyle. Hence, as a person has a range of priorities that are ranked from what he/she values the most important to what he/she values the least, financial security often ranks the top.
However, there are situations in which one's first priority in life is not financial security. Missionaries in third world countries often leave behind their comforts in home countries to serve others, for the purpose of spreading the Gospel to them. The initial decision of choosing to go to an inferior environment in which one may not be able to fulfill his need to sustain his life as well as at his/her original state already shows that his/her priority in life is not about financial security. These people are driven by Christ's love, desiring to lead others to the ultimate truth in life, not money.
Therefore, one's perspective on money largely determines his/her priority regarding financial security in life. This is obvious, since priority is largely determined by what one values. If one views money as a means to achieve happiness and to fulfill his satisfaction, financial security undoubtedly will be his/her first priority in life. However,if one does not view money as a means to achieve happiness and views other values more important, his/her first priority in life will not be financial security.
Successful politicians are motivated more by practical considerations than by moral values.
Politicians exist to improve the society as they deal with a variety of problems that exist in the society. Before being in the position to make certain decisions, however, they need to be elected. Therefore, the success of politicians begins with their victory in election. In order to do that, they need to persuade the citizens to vote for them. In the process of campaigning, they devise various ways to appeal to their citizens - one of which is making practical implications in their speech. Since the role of politicians is to improve the society by solving its problems, citizens are likely to pay attention to remarks that consist of practical considerations that can solve various problems. Hence, politicians who make such claims are likely to be elected, signifying the starting point of their successful career as politicians.
However, there are instances in which successful politicians may be motivated by moral values than by practical considerations. Several decades ago, there was a time in which South Korea where it was economically stable. Due to that stability, people were being lazy and during the time of election, Senator Kim had a slogan that promoted people to be diligent. His campaign awoke the society as a whole, invoking people to be diligent and work harder even in times of prosperity. He easily won his election and made decisions that furthered the prosperity of South Korea.
Therefore, the condition of the society is crucial in determining the motivations of successful politicians. If the society has lots of problems with which the citizens suffer, politicians should be motivated by practical considerations, seeking to amend the problems in the society. However, if the society does not have many problems, which is less often than the former scenario, then politicians may be motivated by moral values, promoting certain values as diligence as they campaign and encourage citizens to apply those values to their lives.
Quick Question: In the first paragraph, I really don't have to given an example, right? (since I just have to explain what the prompt means...) Also, do I have to define every single term? - "successful", "practical", "moral values" or is what I did sufficient for that paragraph?
Thank you so much you guys! 🙂
update - finished another one...this one took about 12 min!
A person's first priority in life should be financial security.
Although humans are driven by different motivations to achieve their goals in lives, there is a similarity among this range of differences: financial security. Since living a life accompanies a need to buy commodities that are necessary to sustain the life itself, money is crucial in sustaining or even improving one's lifestyle. Hence, as a person has a range of priorities that are ranked from what he/she values the most important to what he/she values the least, financial security often ranks the top.
However, there are situations in which one's first priority in life is not financial security. Missionaries in third world countries often leave behind their comforts in home countries to serve others, for the purpose of spreading the Gospel to them. The initial decision of choosing to go to an inferior environment in which one may not be able to fulfill his need to sustain his life as well as at his/her original state already shows that his/her priority in life is not about financial security. These people are driven by Christ's love, desiring to lead others to the ultimate truth in life, not money.
Therefore, one's perspective on money largely determines his/her priority regarding financial security in life. This is obvious, since priority is largely determined by what one values. If one views money as a means to achieve happiness and to fulfill his satisfaction, financial security undoubtedly will be his/her first priority in life. However,if one does not view money as a means to achieve happiness and views other values more important, his/her first priority in life will not be financial security.
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