Feedback on Personal Statement

[preDoGuy24]

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Hey guys just wondering if someone may be willing to give me some feedback on my personal statement. I had a really intense E.D. volunteering experience last week (young teenage kid committed suicide). I wrote about the experience (had to get it out and off my chest) and am thinking of making it the main part of my personal statement, definitely a different direction than what I was originally intending (rural childhood, need for rural doctors etc.). Any takers ? Could definitely use some anonymous criticism. Keep in mind it is the rough draft (literally just wrote it). PM me if your down.Thanks

 

[agh85]

Quick advice from somebody who has worked for 6 years in mental health.... unless you are going into psychiatry and are going to dedicate your career to working with people with suicidal ideation/attempts...and you really understand the struggles that are found within people with SPMI, I would think there would be a better topic for you to write about.

 

[Adamb83]

Gladly read yours if you read mine 🙂

Send me a PM.

I also changed my personal statement... about a thousand times. So you're not alone

 

[preDoGuy24]

Quick advice from somebody who has worked for 6 years in mental health.... unless you are going into psychiatry and are going to dedicate your career to working with people with suicidal ideation/attempts...and you really understand the struggles that are found within people with SPMI, I would think there would be a better topic for you to write about.

Understandable, definitely plenty "good" experiences I can write about, but not many as intense as a teenage kid who was an only child, who shot himself in the head and was life flighted into the hospital I was volunteering at. It was the first major trauma code I had seen at a large regional trauma center. The personal statement doesn't touch the mental health aspects, I am in fact not very interested in psychology, it is more about the reality of medicine and how I view it changed with the experience.



Thanks for the offer adam83 I will shoot you a PM, after I finish cleaning it up a bit!