Cuttinemup said it best.
I went through 13 different versions of my personal statement. The first 12 consisted of me trying to sound too professional and fancy. I used too many cliches and BS statements. I kept rereading it and finding myself very unpleased with the entire structure.
So one day I just sat down (at work nonetheless) and I just started typing. Typing about my childhood, my life growing up and transitioned all the way to the present. Of course it was very rough but I captured a lot of things that I normally wouldn't have written if I actually sat down and thought hard about it.
I got probably the best feedbacks on the *rough* draft, not even the final version. Every person that read it said it was very touching, interesting and most importantly, it showed a personal side of me that most people don't see.