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When it came to goals in mine, I stated what I am interested in with a comment about potentially discovering a better fit while in vet school (with more clarity and conciseness, of course!)
I must have missed this when if first went around....I was in Laos, Mynamar and Thailand....but I really want to do a service project in Mongolia.
I wrote my PS as a series of random sentences. I would get an idea of something that I wanted to mention, write it down, try to perfect the sentence without any other content, and stop. Do this enough, and all I had to do was connect the sentences.
For example, I knew I wanted to share the story about working on the Jumbo express in Thailand...treating elephants and livestock regardless of cultural or political boundaries because it wsa an experience that reframed my life. So that came out as a paragraph of its own, which started my PS. I also mentioned that I maintained my GPA in spite of working more than forty hours a week while attending full time, and that my recent science GPA of 4.0 indicated that I could still perform. I also shared, how my mother took me to work with her, when she was a vet tech, and I learned the value of even the grungiest jobs, and how my father, despite a lack of a HS education, acquired discarded microscopes from a pharm company that we would rebuild together and how all of that inspired my passion for science and animals.
I handed off my PS to anyone and everyone who would read it, except my parents (huge critics.) I even had a couple of magazine editors go over it, which was nice. One actually encouraged me to break every grammatical rule in the last paragraph; I wrote that I know I will do well in vet med because my entire career has pushed me towards this occupational path....with the word WILL all capitalized and the sentence a fragment. However, it gave a punch of confidence to the end of the essay, matching the start (a sentence about an elephant tugging on my toe.)
I wrote the PS by random sentences over a 2 month period, shoved it together in 3-4 days, distributed it from the 3 rd draft on, and did 7 revisions based on feedback. When I gave it to individuals, I would ask for any feedback they cared to give, and shared what I was most concerned about, and the most important concepts I wanted to express. I asked the reader to read it first, jot down their major impressions, then compare it to my list of important concepts and concerns and see what they came up with.
I did address a lower than ideal GPA against much advice from other pre-vets, but in a single sentence sighting the reason very briefly and offering evidence of improvements over 4 years and my recent 4.0 GPA.
I personally found the supplemental essays problematic.
I must have missed this when if first went around....I was in Laos, Mynamar and Thailand....but I really want to do a service project in Mongolia.
I wrote my PS as a series of random sentences. I would get an idea of something that I wanted to mention, write it down, try to perfect the sentence without any other content, and stop. Do this enough, and all I had to do was connect the sentences.
For example, I knew I wanted to share the story about working on the Jumbo express in Thailand...treating elephants and livestock regardless of cultural or political boundaries because it wsa an experience that reframed my life. So that came out as a paragraph of its own, which started my PS. I also mentioned that I maintained my GPA in spite of working more than forty hours a week while attending full time, and that my recent science GPA of 4.0 indicated that I could still perform. I also shared, how my mother took me to work with her, when she was a vet tech, and I learned the value of even the grungiest jobs, and how my father, despite a lack of a HS education, acquired discarded microscopes from a pharm company that we would rebuild together and how all of that inspired my passion for science and animals.
I handed off my PS to anyone and everyone who would read it, except my parents (huge critics.) I even had a couple of magazine editors go over it, which was nice. One actually encouraged me to break every grammatical rule in the last paragraph; I wrote that I know I will do well in vet med because my entire career has pushed me towards this occupational path....with the word WILL all capitalized and the sentence a fragment. However, it gave a punch of confidence to the end of the essay, matching the start (a sentence about an elephant tugging on my toe.)
I wrote the PS by random sentences over a 2 month period, shoved it together in 3-4 days, distributed it from the 3 rd draft on, and did 7 revisions based on feedback. When I gave it to individuals, I would ask for any feedback they cared to give, and shared what I was most concerned about, and the most important concepts I wanted to express. I asked the reader to read it first, jot down their major impressions, then compare it to my list of important concepts and concerns and see what they came up with.
I did address a lower than ideal GPA against much advice from other pre-vets, but in a single sentence sighting the reason very briefly and offering evidence of improvements over 4 years and my recent 4.0 GPA.
I personally found the supplemental essays problematic.
