How Formal/Informal Should Secondaries Be?

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I assume that it probably varies from school to school, but I find myself struggling with sounding kind of like a robot. Does saying things like "a student would benefit" instead of "I would appreciate" sound more professional, or are schools genuinely looking to get a better picture of us personally. With some questions the personal choice is obvious, like "why us" questions or "think of a time" questions. I'm referring specifically to questions like "why is diversity important". The response is obvious and I can write a strong answer, but do they generally want me to use informal language? I feel drawn to formal language for my reach schools and informal for my target and undershoot schools. Thank you in advance for your help!

 

[LizzyM]

Use the active voice, not passive. Schools want your opinions, experiences, and observations so don't be afraid of "I" statements. Write in the way you speak in a professional situation such an an interview.

 

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Use the active voice, not passive. Schools want your opinions, experiences, and observations so don't be afraid of "I" statements. Write in the way you speak in a professional situation such an an interview.

Thank you!

 

[BeMoConsulting]

Hi there!

The first thing you need to keep in mind is that using personal language and using informal language are two different things. The idea behind secondaries is that they help programs know a little bit more about you and about those attributes that make you a good fit (hence the need to provide well-written secondaries that showcase your skills and create a narrative that is compelling and personal). A secondary essay is an academic document, and therefore, a formal register is expected. This means avoiding contractions, abbreviations, and expressions that are too colloquial. It does not mean using sophisticated and flowery language that will complicate the reading. In other words, you can use personal language and still maintain a formal register. What is important to remember is that secondary essays should be: (1) Quick: you must be clear and direct in your writing, (2) Concise: answer all the questions asked in the prompts, instantiating your points with examples, and (3) Coherent: use an academic format structure (introduction, 2 to 3 body paragraphs, conclusion). For some of the shorter secondary essays, introductory or concluding paragraphs may not be necessary or possible, but they should still have a clear opening, a main point illustrated by examples, followed by a closing. Do not be afraid of sounding like you because that is what is expected. Do not try to sound smart and embellish your words, as this will prevent you from showcasing who you really are. Hope this helps and best of luck to you!