Is this an overworked topic in personal statements?

[FlowLimited]

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lol. Why jump to conclusions?
I'm not like most other people here who act like 12 year olds here, haha. You brought up a legitimate question, so I decided to explain it to you. And what does being a good/bad doctor have anything to do with good writing?

And I'm the one being accused of taking things too literally...

 

[LizzyM]

Something from the top of my head:
I am someone who can help ease the fear for children who are about to undergo surgery. To many, I am like a night light that provides security, trust, and confidence to those who feel uneasy in a dark room that is casted by the thought of surgery.

You don't seem too great with figurative language. It looks like you took my hyperbole with the pterodactyl quite literally.

I hope you would follow up that initial paragraph with examples of how you have done those things. (show the reader rather than just telling).

 

[Omni]

That was just a demo. The OP was asking for a way to write the essay. OP was saying that he/she has a tendency of putting children at ease, so I suggested writing a figurative essay and gave an example of what to write.

Also, whats your take on making PSes that use figurative language like metaphors, imagery, and the such?

 

[nick_carraway]

That was just a demo. The OP was asking for a way to write the essay. OP was saying that he/she has a tendency of putting children at ease, so I suggested writing a figurative essay and gave an example of what to write.

Also, whats your take on making PSes that use figurative language like metaphors, imagery, and the such?

I would say that your example actually came out better than anyone had expected.

 

[mangoroxmysox]

I would say that your example actually came out better than anyone had expected.

I agree haha. At first, I thought that the whole light idea made it sound like the kid was dying!

 

[LizzyM]

That was just a demo. The OP was asking for a way to write the essay. OP was saying that he/she has a tendency of putting children at ease, so I suggested writing a figurative essay and gave an example of what to write.

Also, whats your take on making PSes that use figurative language like metaphors, imagery, and the such?

I think that it is a matter of taste. Keep in mind that your readers will be physicians and medical students, plus basic science professors, and faculty in bioethics, medical humanities, public health, anthropology & medical education. That's an educated but broad audience with varied taste in writing.

 

[Kaustikos]

Something from the top of my head:
I am someone who can help ease the fear for children who are about to undergo surgery. To many, I am like a night light that provides security, trust, and confidence to those who feel uneasy in a dark room that is casted by the thought of surgery.

You don't seem too great with figurative language. It looks like you took my hyperbole with the pterodactyl quite literally.

Uh oh, here it comes. I bet you think I'll make a terrible doctor too. Also, if you make the changes above, we're suddenly talking about Batman.

I want to cast fear onto those who use fear on the masses. I had a fear of surgery and so why not use it invertly on those who fear it as well? My initial unsubstantiated reason has manifested itself into the underlying theme for my desire to become the one who can take responsibility for all that is bad in healthcare, for I can take it, I can take the abuse as the symbol that I am. That is what I was meant for, to represent one that will sacrifice his intentions to take the blame so that the idea of healthcare may continue on in this world.


Also,

Doctor - WHY DO YOU WANT TO KILL ME?
Lawyer - I don't wanna' kill you. No, I need you. You complete me!

 

[FlowLimited]

I want to cast fear onto those who use fear on the masses. I had a fear of surgery and so why not use it invertly on those who fear it as well? My initial unsubstantiated reason has manifested itself into the underlying theme for my desire to become the one who can take responsibility for all that is bad in healthcare, for I can take it, I can take the abuse as the symbol that I am. That is what I was meant for, to represent one that will sacrifice his intentions to take the blame so that the idea of healthcare may continue on in this world.

Fantastic. Batman would be proud.

 

[grabbinsumpeels]

To many, I am like a night light that provides security, trust, and confidence to those who feel uneasy

 

[FlowLimited]

And.....my Batman comment has successfuly hijacked this thread.

 

[mangoroxmysox]

And.....my Batman comment has successfuly hijacked this thread.

I agree lol. I never quite got an answer to my second question...

 

[grabbinsumpeels]

And.....my Batman comment has successfuly hijacked this thread.

Well, to be fair I think it was Omni's imaginative narrative that hijacked this thread, but yarrr anyways...

Thanks for your responses...they have been very helpful 🙂

I do have a lot of experience comforting adult patients, but I have more experience comforting children that are scared to death. Would it be feasible to write about comforting a child, or should I stick to writing about providing emotional support to adults?

Either one should be fine as long as they are relevant to your desire to study medicine. Also, there's no reason why you have limit yourself to discussing just one of those experiences if they both played a similar role.

 

[Kaustikos]

Well, to be fair I think it was Omni's imaginative narrative that hijacked this thread, but yarrr anyways...



Either one should be fine as long as they are relevant to your desire to study medicine. Also, there's no reason why you have limit yourself to discussing just one of those experiences if they both played a similar role.

The difficulty is fitting those experiences in your PS. Remember the character restrains.

 

[dr seuss]

Mountains beyond Mountains by Kidder a book about Paul Farmer, MD. Sometimes I wonder what inspired folks to go into medicine before that book was published.

I looked at amazon to see what it said about it, and the name of the first reviewer is...Liz. 😱 Coincidence? I think not. 😉

 

[Food]

Omni's style is a little too figurative and literary for me, but that's fine. It works out really well for some people. For my purposes, I used a sort of newspaper columnist / editorial narrative style. It served the purpose of scrutinizing my life best, especially since I'm a re applicant and had to address it confidently. To establish this theme I alluded to current events quite frequently and tied them in with my experiences. You just have to create the right mixture of tones. I also prefer to write shorter, more direct sentences, as long as they have a degree of sophistication. This is not at all how I write on SDN haha. I type on SDN how I think out loud.

 

[Narmerguy]

Something from the top of my head:
I am someone who can help ease the fear for children who are about to undergo surgery. To many, I am like a night light that provides security, trust, and confidence to those who feel uneasy in a dark room that is casted by the thought of surgery.

I was skeptical but you actually pulled it off better than I expected. This is a fair bit different from the type of light you originally seemed to be describing but I like the way you did it here. 👍