My secondary essay for a "difficulty in my life that I had to overcome"

[jbing]

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[Pinkertinkle]

Excellent.

 

[Blake]

Excellent.

My exact thoughts

 

[superdevil]

Origianlly Posted by jbing
As I felt the warm narrow stream shoot out my ass

classic line... 👍

 

[LauraMac]

haha, i was getting ready to give advice on whether or not something was appropriate.

great story!

 

[liverotcod]

I like your comparison to the Ganges River. Here's a neat description of it:
"However, industry is not the only source of pollution [in the river Ganga]. Sheer volume of waste - estimated at nearly 1 billion litres per day - of mostly untreated raw sewage - is a significant factor. Also, inadequate cremation procedures contributes to a large number of partially burnt or unburnt corpses floating down the Ganga"
from http://www.cs.albany.edu/~amit/ganges.html

 

[krelian]

I knew that as you decreased the area of passage through which a fluid passed, you would increase the speed of the fluid through that passage.

To make your story more impressive and (ahem) more scientifically sophisticated, you could refer to the principle of mass conservation for fluids: Area*velocity=k.

Excellent story overall. Since you've taken the time & effort to craft it, why not send it off w/ your secondary. It would be a waste to not use such beautiful prose

 

[jlee9531]

fart is too colloquial. use something more formal please.

 

[Medikit]

Yeah, I agree with jlee, you should be using flatulate or whizzpopper in place of fart.