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I know its late in the cycle to start applying, but I am still going to, i just have trouble with my personal statement. i feel like i have so many things to talk about because they all add up to wanting to be a doctor, and it's too much. i'm not sure what to narrow it down too, and at this point i don't want to spend time writing out everything (i want to submit by the end of this week).
here are all the subjects in my life i want to talk about in the PS; can you guys please tell me which are ok and interesting things and which things should be cut out?
1. throughout high school i did art and was supposed to go to art school, but after being part of an art show for a scholarship, i realised i definitely wont be fulfilled this way. my artwork was mostly about social issues and images of suffering people that i want to help, and i realized it was just my way of expressing my real passion. (its written as a story on the day of the art show in front of the judges). i knew i had to do something more challenging and rewarding.. i think its good to talk about because it shows my creativity and a 3d view of me as someone with hobbies
2. my first memory of wanting to help people (i don't say it like that, i just talk about the experience): spent a lot of my childhood in pakistan where i would see the crippled homeless kids on the street begging, and how cold people are to their situation. so i've been interested in handicapped people since the age of 4/5 when i saw what was going on trying to understand people's lack of compassion.
3. my little brother has down syndrome- the doctors said he would not walk or talk and have any kind of normal life.. even before he was born they thought my mom should have an abortion. but i pushed him and helped him learn to walk. he's now 13 and he speaks full sentences he's really smart. i want to just touch on caring for him and raising him.. and how it prepared me.. i want to help other people overcome their disadvantages also. i know i definitely want to mention my brother, it is a big part of my life.
4. my dad had a heart attack when i was little and then he became depressed. a few years later he quit his job.. my family has been in financial stress for a while so it explains me taking care of my family/working thru school and all that. lessons: i am humbled by it and ready to make sacrifices for other people, and put their needs first.
the problem with this part is by story-telling, the story is long.. is it sufficient to briefly mention?
5. my health problems- i am diagnosed with PCOS and rheumatoid arthritis. adjusting was difficult at first- i got a little depressed, but my grades and activities do show that i'm doing well. are these good weaknesses to mention? most of my friends dont even know i have RA or anything and i do my best not to show when my hands stiffen up or some physical activity is strenuous for me.. and most of the time i feel normal besides some adjustments. i exercise and started eating better, and manage my stress since it triggers arthritis attacks. i feel like this is something interesting to mention and definitely shows i have empathy for sick people and pain, but i also want the adcom to know im capable and overcame this weakness.. lets hope it will be convincing.
6. i'm a physical therapy aide in a unique program for kids with cerebral palsy. its really individualized and intensive and has helped a lot of kids. i really would like to share how they inspire me and my empathy here. it goes hand in hand with overcoming weaknesses/handicaps
7. back to beginning, transitioning from art to science- and i think these two interests/differences are best reconciled by practicing medicine. here i also want to mention that as i got into science i got into research, and how art has helped me find creative solutions in research (biophysics research in the physics department.. we're not equipped for biological research so you have to improvise and find creative ways to do things when you have limited resources). want to show here also how much i enjoy learning and developing skills.
(i'd like to do some research as an MD but i dont enjoy it enough to do PhD and while i got into college thinking i would do physics, i finally just accepted and determined to take the more arduous route of medicine,deep down its always what i wanted to do but i just had fears since i'm a girl that wants to have a family-- this is just extra info and not part of my PS.. wouldn't know how to express it).
if you read this far, i commend and thank you!! if not, i understand. you can see my dilemma.. should i just attempt to write short vignettes about everything? its really difficult for me to decide on 2 or 3 things to elaborate.. but i want to effectively tell the story, sigh..
if anyone can go through each one and recommend what the main points should be and what to emphasize more.. please!! thank you so much
here are all the subjects in my life i want to talk about in the PS; can you guys please tell me which are ok and interesting things and which things should be cut out?
1. throughout high school i did art and was supposed to go to art school, but after being part of an art show for a scholarship, i realised i definitely wont be fulfilled this way. my artwork was mostly about social issues and images of suffering people that i want to help, and i realized it was just my way of expressing my real passion. (its written as a story on the day of the art show in front of the judges). i knew i had to do something more challenging and rewarding.. i think its good to talk about because it shows my creativity and a 3d view of me as someone with hobbies
2. my first memory of wanting to help people (i don't say it like that, i just talk about the experience): spent a lot of my childhood in pakistan where i would see the crippled homeless kids on the street begging, and how cold people are to their situation. so i've been interested in handicapped people since the age of 4/5 when i saw what was going on trying to understand people's lack of compassion.
3. my little brother has down syndrome- the doctors said he would not walk or talk and have any kind of normal life.. even before he was born they thought my mom should have an abortion. but i pushed him and helped him learn to walk. he's now 13 and he speaks full sentences he's really smart. i want to just touch on caring for him and raising him.. and how it prepared me.. i want to help other people overcome their disadvantages also. i know i definitely want to mention my brother, it is a big part of my life.
4. my dad had a heart attack when i was little and then he became depressed. a few years later he quit his job.. my family has been in financial stress for a while so it explains me taking care of my family/working thru school and all that. lessons: i am humbled by it and ready to make sacrifices for other people, and put their needs first.
the problem with this part is by story-telling, the story is long.. is it sufficient to briefly mention?
5. my health problems- i am diagnosed with PCOS and rheumatoid arthritis. adjusting was difficult at first- i got a little depressed, but my grades and activities do show that i'm doing well. are these good weaknesses to mention? most of my friends dont even know i have RA or anything and i do my best not to show when my hands stiffen up or some physical activity is strenuous for me.. and most of the time i feel normal besides some adjustments. i exercise and started eating better, and manage my stress since it triggers arthritis attacks. i feel like this is something interesting to mention and definitely shows i have empathy for sick people and pain, but i also want the adcom to know im capable and overcame this weakness.. lets hope it will be convincing.
6. i'm a physical therapy aide in a unique program for kids with cerebral palsy. its really individualized and intensive and has helped a lot of kids. i really would like to share how they inspire me and my empathy here. it goes hand in hand with overcoming weaknesses/handicaps
7. back to beginning, transitioning from art to science- and i think these two interests/differences are best reconciled by practicing medicine. here i also want to mention that as i got into science i got into research, and how art has helped me find creative solutions in research (biophysics research in the physics department.. we're not equipped for biological research so you have to improvise and find creative ways to do things when you have limited resources). want to show here also how much i enjoy learning and developing skills.
(i'd like to do some research as an MD but i dont enjoy it enough to do PhD and while i got into college thinking i would do physics, i finally just accepted and determined to take the more arduous route of medicine,deep down its always what i wanted to do but i just had fears since i'm a girl that wants to have a family-- this is just extra info and not part of my PS.. wouldn't know how to express it).
if you read this far, i commend and thank you!! if not, i understand. you can see my dilemma.. should i just attempt to write short vignettes about everything? its really difficult for me to decide on 2 or 3 things to elaborate.. but i want to effectively tell the story, sigh..
if anyone can go through each one and recommend what the main points should be and what to emphasize more.. please!! thank you so much
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