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Alright guys,


When writing your personal essays, how many drafts did you go through before the final one?

When did you start writing your essay?

Generally, what is the best way to approach the topic without sounding too obnoxious (like a certain HS troll)?

What is the best plan of attack if you are a non-trad?

I am in the process of visiting schools, getting my LORs, prepping for the MCAT and wanting to start drafting the personal essay.
 
hey...it's awesome that you're doing everything ahead of time.

when i was writing my personal statement, i wanted to approach it a bit differently. i developed a kinda 'story' out of a significant life experience. during my junior year of college, i workedin a hospital as a patient monitor. i took an experience i had with one of my patients and began my personal statement with that. i described the hospital setting and then got into what kinda impression she had on me.

one thing you definetly want to make sure you have, if you take this approach, is excellent transitions. i.e, if you're gonna jump from a personal experience to coursework, explain how the experience drove you to take a particular class.

in addition, you wanna make yourself shine in your personal statment, but you don't wanna repeat everything you've written up in your amcas application. don't give a breakdown of your grades. if you're on the dean's list, or have graduated with honors, mention that. it's understood, pretty much, that your grades had to have been pretty good to attain that level.

also, you can focus on a particular extracurriular activity you participated in. pick an activity that was most meaningful for you. explain what it taught you, and most importantly, how you can take these lessons and apply them to your medical career/education. when i concluded my statement, i gave a list of positive attributes i drew from my experiences.

and definetly, PROOFREAD CONSTANTLY. you don't need to use excessively big words (that's not what impresses the adcomm). i wrote 6 drafts...and must have proofread a million times. have a friend proofread as well. i had my journalism advisor look over mine, and he gave excellent suggestions.

lots of luck with ur statement. hope this helped you. 🙂
 
1 Draft, 2500 characters, written in about 2 hours, due the next day to the premed committee. Procrastination is a blast!

I don't think this is nearly as important as people make it out to be. Just use it to state your reason for going into medicine or to talk about an aspect of medicine that you love. Don't be negative, don't try to use words that you aren't very familiar with, don't use contractions, and don't make stuff up. As long as you are using Word or a similar program that will check your spelling and grammar, you should be ok.

~AS1~
 
I guess I would have to disagree with AlternateSome1 regarding the value of the personal statement. I think it IS important because it is the only time (other than the interview) that med schools hear your voice. While med schools may see your ECs, they won't really know what drove you to pursue them. Also, they won't know what you learned from them. The section on AMCAS where you have to enter your ECs gives you only 500 characters to describe them. For me, that was only three sentences most of the time. I ended up giving just a brief description of each activity. I waited for my personal statement to expand on my most importatant ECs and life experiences.

I went through seven drafts of my personal statement. In all, it took me a little over a month to put together. I would highly recommend having multiple people proofread your essay. I had a English professor, girlfriend and resident look at mine. It was pefect because each could point out something in their respective fields. My English professor highlighted grammatical errors. My girlfriend called me on my bulls*%t (when I wasn't putting a lot of work into it). And the resident caught an error in my use of a medical term. I think the key is that you want to have proofreaders that will be completely honest with you.

Again, I think the personal statement is pretty important. In fact, during all of my interviews something very specific to my personal statement was brought up. A couple interviewers even thanked me for sharing my story and putting so much work into my personal statement. Lastly, when I received an acceptance call from Vanderbilt, the Dean of Admissions brought up my personal statement and how it gave him a very good picture of me.
 
The personal statement is huge. It probably took me 6-7 drafts and then it was proofread about 20 times by different people. Make sure that it is not boring. You need to be unique and have a strong voice. I had never wrote anything like this before so I had a hard time in the begining developing my voice. I would suggest reading through successful personal statements so you have a feel of how they should be written. I checked a book out from the library that had good personal statements in it. I knew my pesonal statement was finished when I was going to literally get sick if I looked at it another time.

Good Luck!!!!
 
Originally posted by EMT2ER-DOC
Alright guys,


When writing your personal essays, how many drafts did you go through before the final one?

When did you start writing your essay?

Generally, what is the best way to approach the topic without sounding too obnoxious (like a certain HS troll)?

What is the best plan of attack if you are a non-trad?

I am in the process of visiting schools, getting my LORs, prepping for the MCAT and wanting to start drafting the personal essay.

My school asks you to write an autobiography for the pre-health committee so I already started thinking about my personal statement in January of this year. The autobiography however was 11 pages so I had to cut it down quite a bit to meet the 5300 character limit. I ran through about 4-5 drafts and had my campus writing center evaluate it several times.

IMHO, the personal statement is really important because you get an opportunity to express your own motivations for going into medicine. Also you get an opportunity to distinguish yourself amongst the vast numbers of great applicants.
 
Don't underestimate the value of the personal statement, no matter how great your stats are. It's a chance to not only show what you've done and experienced, but reveal to the admissions committee how those things have affected your thinking and changed you.

I got help from Jeannie Burlowski, a private consultant that helps pre-meds with their applications. I was very pleased with the help she offered me, and am proof that a great personal statement goes a long way. My stats are well below what is considered to be necessary for medical school, and I have several interviews scheduled and am still waiting to hear from over half of the schools to which I've applied (my secondaries were submitted around Thanksgiving).

Do all that you can to make your personal statement outstanding! It could very well mean the difference between getting in and being rejected.
 
Hey ClemsonDoc, how did you like the consultant that you used? Where did you find her? What did she do for you?

Thanks.
 
SO far I am on my second (and hopefully final) draft. All told- about 10 hours or so of time. I think it is extremely important for older students (like myself) to explain their transition to medicine. Why medicine, why now?

I have given my drafts to my pre-med advisor, my professors, my uncle, my mother and a few other people whose input I value.
 
I've posted on these forums before regarding how to plan for a personal statement. Here are some of my thoughts that I wrote to a friend in an email back in June of 2003. I am applying for the Fall 2004 entering class.

"I actually started synthesizing my personal statement
about 6 months ago. 1.5 years prior to that, I made sure that I kept a journal of any events, thoughts, or people I thought to be
influential (and how they influenced me) on my decision
to become a physician, or things that make me who I am today.
In the end, I condensed my journal
writing (approximately 50pages of
type 10 font, single space) into a list of bulleted
thoughts (about a page long). From there, I proceeded
to brainstorm some themes that I saw to be common
amongst my most influential topics on my bulleted
list. Once I picked my theme and 3-4 topics of
interest (it's as hard as hell to try to not use all
of the topics bulleted, but I forced myself to limit
it for reasons listed below), I used my journal
entries to write my statement (it's pretty amazing how
much feeling you can put into a journal entry when it
is fresh in your mind). From there, it was mostly
playing with revisions for six months and rewriting
the intro and conclusion over and over again. Finally
I came to the end product. If your anything like me,
totally science oriented with skills lacking in
written communication, you need to start this project
super early. In all I spent a year and a half on
maintaining a journal, and half a year putting it all
together, for a total of two years worth of work. But
in the end it was totally worth it, and I believe my
personal statement truly represents what I found to be
pivotal to why I want to go into the field of
medicine.

If you end up having a bulleted list a mile long, try
doing what I did. Pick the 3-4 most compatible topics
that make a cohesive theme. The other topics on your
list can be inputted into the 15 post-secondary
experiences in the form of mini-essays. So, in this
way I was able to put down all that I deemed made me
suitable for the field of medicine. When my personal
statement and post-secondary experience fields were
lacking in a particular area that I believe is
important to me, I requested that my recommenders
focus a good portion of their letters on these topics.
In addition, I requested that they comment positively
on any inconsistancies that may show up in my
application ( 1)my science focus has been counter
balanced by my comparative religious studies
professor's letter, 2)my less than stellar background
in written communication and verbal reasoning (VR 8)
has been compensated by me asking my professors to
positively comment on my written and oral
communication skills. In this way, I believe my
application has become well-rounded. Yes, the
Personal Statement is important, and should state many
good reasons for the question of "why medicine?"
However, in my mind focusing on making the personal
statement somewhat interesting (want it to catch their
eye so that they will pay attention to the rest of the
application), and utilizing the post-secondary
experiences and letter writers, a well rounded
application can be obtained by anyone.


(Referring to my friend🙂
I think you have plenty of positve experiences that
show that you have tested the waters of medicine. The
secret to writing the personal statement is relating
each experience back to the theme you have chosen and
how it has influenced your view in medicine. For
example:

Blah Blah Blah... (insert an experience)... Blah Blah
Blah... has made me realize that there is something
more to just science in the field of medicine... Blah
Blah Blah... (insert transition sentence).

There are two things to notice: 1)stating an
experience (one of the 3-4 topics picked) and then
2)saying how it has influenced you. #2 is the
trickiest, because you want to come across as a person
who is humble (emphasize the whole "I have so much to
learn[from professors, patients and experiences]
idea"), proud to be a part of something big (in this
way you could lend creedance to your
professors/physicians that have been influential in
your life), and constantly improving on specific
traits (i.e. it has allowed me to hone my skills in
the art of patient interaction). One major fault to
avoid is to explain an observance (i.e. you observed a
physician performing a procedure), but fail to relate
it back to how you will apply that experience in your
own life (i.e. it has driven me to be a more sensitive
person... blah blah blah...). To this end, I can
totally understand your statement that you have always
wanted to be a physician. (Referring to my
friends statement in an email.) However, I think the
admissions committees are looking for examples of how
you have tested this notion that you have held since
your youth. In other words, it is already expected
that you should want to help people. On a bizarre
note, one sure way to not get into medical school is
to say, "I don't like people, I have trouble
interacting with them, and I faint at the sign of
blood."

In the end, you will probably find (as did I) that it
was not any one particular/spectacular event in your
life that has lead you into the field of medicine, but
a multitude of positive experiences all reaffirming
your choice to be a physician. Your job is to say
which ones are the most important, and creatively
explain how they relate to your qualifying skillset as
a future physician. In my opinion, I believe that a
person who focuses on a good sampling of experiences
(even if they were not extraordinary), is much better
off than the person who takes his whole personal
statement to say how he saved a child from an oncoming
train. As spectacular as that may sound to that
applicant, he will have missed the opportunity to show
leadership, maturity, humbleness, communication and a
multitude of other traits that can truly only come
from an applicant that has really tested the waters,
so to speak. So in that sense, I believe you're in
the best position for explaining why you want to be a
physician. (Again, referring to my friend's email.)
 
I just sent you a pm, dradams.
 
Thanks for your input, MDTom.🙂
 
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