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Personal Statement Critiques

Discussion in 'Pre-Medical Allopathic [ MD ]' started by CodeRedDew, Apr 27, 2012.

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  1. CodeRedDew

    CodeRedDew Thirst Quencher 5+ Year Member

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    I have recently finished my first draft of my personal statement. Anyone willing to constructively criticize it so that I can find out different ways to improve it?
     
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    Aerus Elemental Alchemist 2+ Year Member

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    SDN isn't really the best place for personal statement critiques. I highly recommend you have some friends, perhaps a few professors, and maybe family members read it through. Get a lot of perspectives on it and different opinions on how to improve it, so that your personal statement will have a much higher chance of appealing to a random adcom person.

    Make sure you're careful about whose advice/corrections you get too. Consider all the suggestions you get but take them all with a grain of salt.
     
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    WhizoMD 7+ Year Member

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    i'll read it, send me a pm
     
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    circulus vitios 7+ Year Member

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    While this thread is active, would anyone mind reading mine really quickly? It's an incredibly rough draft. I just want to know if I'm heading in the right direction. :oops:
     
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    WhizoMD 7+ Year Member

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    :hello:
     
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    MDschoolorbust SDN Gold Donor Gold Donor 2+ Year Member

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    If anyone isn't too shy, I'd love to take a look at someones. I know it is a personal statement but it would be nice to see how other people are laying it out.
     
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    Dartmouth1230 2+ Year Member

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    As someone who already applied (and who isn't really doing much until med school starts), I'm more than happy to help out and read your personal statements - I know how stressful this part of the year is. Just send me a PM.
     
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    wolfie77 2+ Year Member

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    I would be willing to read someone's. Disclosure of credentials:

    I've been called a great writer by quite a few of my professors and got 5's on both the AP Lit and the AP Lang. However, I am not an English major.
     
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    catzzz88 Purrrrrr!?!11?? 5+ Year Member

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    Hi all,

    I was a science writer in college; had my own column in the Features section! Although I wasn't an english major or anything, I would be willing to critique a few personal statements. Don't expect big picture stuff or advice about content, but I can give grammatical advice, help re-word sentences, etc.

    Might be easier if you send a particular paragraph that you are having trouble with and any sentence before and after the paragraph (for transition help).

    I am just offering!

    Good luck to all! :)

    Best,
    C
     
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    BeanDip4All emt-abcdefgh 7+ Year Member

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    Hey everyone, I'll show you mine if you show me yours ;)

    err... happy to give a pair of eyes to anyone who'd take a read through of mine. Specifically, I'm having trouble with a finicky conclusion. I feel like my last sentence just peter's off without making the impact or high-end note I'd like to end on.

    Any takers? Will PM yall up-thread to gauge interest.

    Cheers,
    Bean
     
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    Send it my way I would be happy to read it!
     
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    Always open to read and give some feedback. Pm me.
     

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