Personal statement help!

[luftfaust]

Hi all,

I'm about to submit my primary application, and wanted to get a feedback on my personal statement.

I've actually had a couple of people read over it. While I had mostly positive feedback, their suggestions were not very specific. So I thought I'd take some time to read/edit it over this weekend and try to get more people take a look at it.

Would anyone be able to comment on my PS? If you could post a reply here, I will PM you the essay.

Thank you in advance!

 

[StudyLater]

I'd have no problem looking it over.

 

[OrdinaryDO]

PM me your PS and I will give you some pointers as I see fit.