Personal statement please help someone!!!

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So I wanted to be a doctor as I have been exposed to the beauty of the human complexity and such when I was in middle school but I am really having trouble about going about writing a good personal statement. What should I do? I don't know what I should write on why I really want to be a doc. Please ur advice would so much be appreciated!!!
 
I'm not trying to be "that guy", but if you don't have any idea as why you want to be a doctor, why do you want to be a doctor?
 
Well. I've always admired doctors. Other than the cliche of helping people I just can't seem to find a specific reason or an event....any help?
 
Well. I've always admired doctors. Other than the cliche of helping people I just can't seem to find a specific reason or an event....any help?

Have you ever shadowed a doctor? Volunteered in a hospital? Anything? If you have no experience in or around medicine, I recommend you get some. Being a doctor is far more than appreciating middle school biology and being nice to people.

We do not know your life story beyond the (very) little you shared. Beyond saying "find out what medicine is" my only other advice is to look at other topics that have interested you. Why do you not want to be a police officer if you like helping people? Why do you not want to be a biologist or anatomist if you like biological complexity? Maybe this will help you answer why you want to be a doctor.

Edit: and considering you posted in pre-osteo, why do you want to be an osteopathic physician?
 
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It's perfectly fine to begin your PS talking about middle school. Mine starts off with a crazy life-changing experience that dates all the way back to when I was 14.

BUT here's a key point: You need to smoothly, chronologically transition from 'middle school thoughts' to your current determination to become a physician. The only way to do that is to incorporate your experiences during which you tested your interest, and specific instances that really reinforced things.

It doesn't necessarily have to be all strictly clinical experiences; for example, I included tutoring students in biology in mine and subtly tied it in with medicine.

Writing your PS requires an incredible amount of self-reflection. This is going to sound so corny that it actually hurts me to type it, but..... try to write your PS in such a way that the adcoms can literally play a movie of your statement inside their mind while they read it. Imagery, details, and specifics are key to a memorable, interesting PS. Reflect on your path and speak from your heart.
 
So I wanted to be a doctor as I have been exposed to the beauty of the human complexity and such when I was in middle school but I am really having trouble about going about writing a good personal statement. What should I do? I don't know what I should write on why I really want to be a doc. Please ur advice would so much be appreciated!!!

If you haven't figured this out yet, then you really have no business applying to medical school. Have you had any medically-related experience? Seeing doctors on TV doesn't count.
 
If you haven't figured this out yet, then you really have no business applying to medical school. Have you had any medically-related experience? Seeing doctors on TV doesn't count.

So I wanted to be a doctor as I have been exposed to the beauty of the human complexity and such when I was in middle school but I am really having trouble about going about writing a good personal statement. What should I do? I don't know what I should write on why I really want to be a doc. Please ur advice would so much be appreciated!!!

Oh, whoa didn't read catch that part of your initial post. Definitely gotta figure out that minor little detail before you write your statement, let alone consider applying! It'd be an incredibly grueling process to put yourself through if you can't come up with genuine reasons why you want to go into medicine. The only answers to "why" can come from you, no one else on here.
 
If these are your only answers to "why medicine?" in an interview, I'm pretty sure you'll be rejected before you leave the room.

Start looking into your heart.



Well. I've always admired doctors. Other than the cliche of helping people I just can't seem to find a specific reason or an event....any help?
 
I'm guessing from ur name that ur family is a major reason why ur pursuing medicine 😉 if that's the case then make sure it's what you want. The medical field is not what it used to be and it will drive u crazy and make u miserable if
U r doing it to please the parents.
 
A few goals for the personal statement:
1) It is to present you to the reader as an interesting person, enough so to keep the reader invested.
2) It should paint a picture as to how you became invested in choosing a career in medicine.
3) It should provide concrete examples of how you have fostered this interest in medicine.

If you do not have healthcare or lab related examples in your life, get some.

If you do not have predetermined goals for your future career in medicine/science, find some. Whether they hold true in the future is inconsequential; You simply need to convince the reader that you have a plan in life and how a career in medicine fits into that.

I've often wondered what a reader would make, of someone who is completely honest, that states they simply chose medicine because it is a fairly stable career which provides a decent income and a level of falsely-perceived prestige which would make your immediate and extended family proud. Is that why you are applying to medical school, Sofia Ahmed, of course it is…
 
Bumping this thread because I have a question about personal statements.

Should I discuss why Osteopathic medicine? Or should I stick to medicine in general?

Should I save why Osteopathic medicine for secondaries? I am not sure if I should discuss it in PS or not. Just looking for some input.
 
The AACOMAS PS doesn't give you any directions or what to focus on, unlike AMCAS. However, you could look at the directions given for the AMCAS PS section and go from there.

I focused my essay on how I got into osteopathic medicine, my shadowing/clinical experiences, and how these experiences solidified my reasoning for pursuing osteopathic medicine.

I would avoid cliche topics such as loving biology in middle/high school, or a devastating/life changing medical event that happened to you or a family (unless you can support and justify it with your academic/EC's). Your PS needs to show the actions you have taken to make sure medicine is the career for you. Actions speak louder than words..so make sure you mention key EC/research, etc.

Basically, anything you say needs to be supported by an example or something that can be verified elsewhere on your application. Make your PS consistent with the rest of your application!

If you feel like pandering to medical schools, focus on your compassion/empathy toward others, clinical experience(s), and leadership roles. Generally, medical schools love to see these qualities in their applicants. Also, check out some of your med school's mission statements, and align your experiences with their goals and values. If you can explain and justify why your shadowing/research/grades/volunteering matches their mission statements, you're golden.

I would also avoid explaining horrible grades/MCAT scores. I did have a horrible verbal score, and a downward trend in my grad school GPA, but I didn't mention it in my PS and I ended up getting 11 ii.....and no body asked about it during my interviews. Don't draw attention to negative things. Focus on your initiative, and positive experiences, and OWN your mistakes and explain how you learned from it (if you do decide to explain red flags in your app).

Hope that helps! 🙂 Good luck
 
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The AACOMAS PS doesn't give you any directions or what to focus on, unlike AMCAS. However, you could look at the directions given for the AMCAS PS section and go from there.

I focused my essay on how I got into osteopathic medicine, my shadowing/clinical experiences, and how these experiences solidified my reasoning for pursuing osteopathic medicine.

I would avoid cliche topics such as loving biology in middle/high school, or a devastating/life changing medical event that happened to you or a family (unless you can support and justify it with your academic/EC's). Your PS needs to show the actions you have taken to make sure medicine is the career for you. Actions speak louder than words..so make sure you mention key EC/research, etc.

Basically, anything you say needs to be supported by an example or something that can be verified elsewhere on your application. Make your PS consistent with the rest of your application!

If you feel like pandering to medical schools, focus on your compassion/empathy toward others, clinical experience(s), and leadership roles. Generally, medical schools love to see these qualities in their applicants. Also, check out some of your med school's mission statements, and align your experiences with their goals and values. If you can explain and justify why your shadowing/research/grades/volunteering matches their mission statements, you're golden.

I would also avoid explaining horrible grades/MCAT scores. I did have a horrible verbal score, and a downward trend in my grad school GPA, but I didn't mention it in my PS and I ended up getting 11 ii.....and no body asked about it during my interviews. Don't draw attention to negative things. Focus on your initiative, and positive experiences, and OWN your mistakes and explain how you learned from it (if you do decide to explain red flags in your app).

Hope that helps! 🙂 Good luck

Thank you. That was really helpful. Is talking about a medically related event to a family that bad? I ended up talking about it. I talked about in a way where it could have been prevented but due to the lack of access to healthcare it ended up being a tragedy.
 
It's funny, because during my first cycle of applications I had the same theme/story. Everyone told me it was a bad idea, and needless to say I didn't get accepted anywhere on my first try. Could it have been the PS? Most likely not a huge factor, but the problem is that you're not focusing on YOUR accomplishments, and your steps to become a doctor.

On my second cycle of applications, my theme for my PS would be about my desire to help those with limited access to healthcare, and how osteopathic prinicples will guide me to my goals ..and I supported it with examples from my ECs.

I would avoid healthcare/ethical/negative things in your PS. Your PS should be about you, your accomplishments and your fitness of becoming a physician.

But I hope you didn't spend the majority of your essay on that. Maybe you should've spent 3-4 sentences on it, and then move on to talk about your goals for providing healthcare to those with limited access or something.
 
It's funny, because during my first cycle of applications I had the same theme/story. Everyone told me it was a bad idea, and needless to say I didn't get accepted anywhere on my first try. Could it have been the PS? Most likely not a huge factor, but the problem is that you're not focusing on YOUR accomplishments, and your steps to become a doctor.

On my second cycle of applications, my theme for my PS would be about my desire to help those with limited access to healthcare, and how osteopathic prinicples will guide me to my goals ..and I supported it with examples from my ECs.

I would avoid healthcare/ethical/negative things in your PS. Your PS should be about you, your accomplishments and your fitness of becoming a physician.

But I hope you didn't spend the majority of your essay on that. Maybe you should've spent 3-4 sentences on it, and then move on to talk about your goals for providing healthcare to those with limited access or something.

I didn't! It was only one paragraph but it is my first paragraph.
 
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