Personal Statement Suggestions?

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akirar

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Hey everyone!

I was wondering if anyone would be willing to look over a few sections of my personal statement, I only need a few parts looked over but can send the whole thing if you want. I am ready to submit, but keep worrying about grammar and spelling mistakes.

Also I have one point in my statement where I sort of come to a revelation and realize that " I was going to help people" Any suggestions on how I can re-word that? It just sounds so childish and informal to me.

Thanks
 
You could always try something like "XYZ experience had revealed insights into my character that I had suspected for years. To serve my needs, I needed to be in the service of others."
 
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