Thanks for the advice on the essay editing services. They are pricey ($80 or so) and I've had so many people read it that they're starting to change it back to how it originally was. I have had my English teacher pick it apart as well but I think it's harder for them to be harsh because they know me. If there's anyone here who has some free time, I would greatly appreciate feedback/help on my personal statement. I must warn you though that it's not that great because I don't have a "life changing moment" or something that greatly impacted my life to write about but if anyone's willing, I'd be happy to email it....thanks!!!