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I know there are threads about this etc, but instead of searching I thought I would take the most direct route. Anyway, I am trying to get my AMCAS submitted, but my personal statement just isn't coming together. So if anyone would look at it and critique I would be appreciative. Thanks.
I cannot begin to fathom the anguish and pain that Peggy must have felt. I would have done anything to help ease her situation, but Peggy didnt want sympathy from anyone. Still, I couldnt help but ponder the injustice of a Kansas school teachers struggle against such insurmountable tragedy. I became acquainted with Peggy while working as a sleep technician, and quickly fostered a relationship with her. She always came in with a glow, and even brought baked goods on more than one occasion. Her primary reason for participating in clinical research was not to aid the science of sleep medicine. It was, however, a way to make ends meet due to her husbands disabling bout with Hepatitis B. Despite her tragedy, Peggy truly inspired me by how gracefully she composed herself. My experiences with Peggy and others have left me with the indelible impression that serving others through medicine is how I want to dedicate my life.
My initial interest in medicine developed during my adolescence. I recall the trust that I had in my physicians, and how comforted I was upon receiving their guidance. Through their care, my physicians did not just fulfill a job qualification, but took the time to build a personal relationship. With every doctor visit, I became more intrigued by the notion that the integration of knowledge and compassion was inseparable when serving others through medicine. The activities and experiences I encountered throughout my collegiate education further instilled the principle that the actions we take can influence an individuals lifefor better or for worse. I believe that I can positively impact the lives of others through medicine.
While at the University of South Dakota, I became very intrigued with studying the various aspects of the human condition, and devoted my undergraduate studies toward humanistic disciplinesphilosophy, psychology, and political science. Needless to say, my studies were very eclectic and beneficial because they exposed me to the diversity of human intellect. At the end of my baccalaureate studies, however, I still had a deep desire to study medicine. Subsequently, I began volunteering at Avera Sacred Heart Hospital to gain more exposure to medicine. While volunteering, I experienced a profound sense of personal fulfillment from giving my time and energy to others. Consequently, it was through these experiences and others like them, that I realized how much medicine could perpetuate such fulfillment.
Thus, while my wife was pursuing her Master of Arts in Audiology at the University of South Dakota, I concurrently used this opportunity to begin the necessary prerequisites for admission to medical school. During that time, I also obtained a Master of Business Administration because I felt an MBA would be valuable in future endeavors. Furthermore, it has become increasingly important to have a working knowledge of business in medicine. I believe that the strengths and assets I have acquired from each academic discipline will serve me well as a physician - there is no denying the human element that is intrinsic to medicine, as well as the administrative roles that physicians have come to accept. Studying these fields has given me greater compassion and understanding for the problems and needs that people face, and has developed me into a balanced individual.
Peggy was one of many individuals that have positively impacted my life. She helped me realize the empathy, compassion, and integrity that health care providers must possess. I am fully aware of the rigors and sacrifice required of becoming a physician, but am confident that the opportunities to aid those in need far outweigh the costs. Serving others is not a sacrifice, but a privilege.
I cannot begin to fathom the anguish and pain that Peggy must have felt. I would have done anything to help ease her situation, but Peggy didnt want sympathy from anyone. Still, I couldnt help but ponder the injustice of a Kansas school teachers struggle against such insurmountable tragedy. I became acquainted with Peggy while working as a sleep technician, and quickly fostered a relationship with her. She always came in with a glow, and even brought baked goods on more than one occasion. Her primary reason for participating in clinical research was not to aid the science of sleep medicine. It was, however, a way to make ends meet due to her husbands disabling bout with Hepatitis B. Despite her tragedy, Peggy truly inspired me by how gracefully she composed herself. My experiences with Peggy and others have left me with the indelible impression that serving others through medicine is how I want to dedicate my life.
My initial interest in medicine developed during my adolescence. I recall the trust that I had in my physicians, and how comforted I was upon receiving their guidance. Through their care, my physicians did not just fulfill a job qualification, but took the time to build a personal relationship. With every doctor visit, I became more intrigued by the notion that the integration of knowledge and compassion was inseparable when serving others through medicine. The activities and experiences I encountered throughout my collegiate education further instilled the principle that the actions we take can influence an individuals lifefor better or for worse. I believe that I can positively impact the lives of others through medicine.
While at the University of South Dakota, I became very intrigued with studying the various aspects of the human condition, and devoted my undergraduate studies toward humanistic disciplinesphilosophy, psychology, and political science. Needless to say, my studies were very eclectic and beneficial because they exposed me to the diversity of human intellect. At the end of my baccalaureate studies, however, I still had a deep desire to study medicine. Subsequently, I began volunteering at Avera Sacred Heart Hospital to gain more exposure to medicine. While volunteering, I experienced a profound sense of personal fulfillment from giving my time and energy to others. Consequently, it was through these experiences and others like them, that I realized how much medicine could perpetuate such fulfillment.
Thus, while my wife was pursuing her Master of Arts in Audiology at the University of South Dakota, I concurrently used this opportunity to begin the necessary prerequisites for admission to medical school. During that time, I also obtained a Master of Business Administration because I felt an MBA would be valuable in future endeavors. Furthermore, it has become increasingly important to have a working knowledge of business in medicine. I believe that the strengths and assets I have acquired from each academic discipline will serve me well as a physician - there is no denying the human element that is intrinsic to medicine, as well as the administrative roles that physicians have come to accept. Studying these fields has given me greater compassion and understanding for the problems and needs that people face, and has developed me into a balanced individual.
Peggy was one of many individuals that have positively impacted my life. She helped me realize the empathy, compassion, and integrity that health care providers must possess. I am fully aware of the rigors and sacrifice required of becoming a physician, but am confident that the opportunities to aid those in need far outweigh the costs. Serving others is not a sacrifice, but a privilege.
