Beware, personally I don't think you should allow any people on this forum to read your personal statement. Let a professor, employer, or family member do so. By allowing people on this forum to do so, they can either:
(1) Receive insight on how to right their own personal statement
(2) Give you either good or bad advice depending on if they know you are in competition with them
Case in point: Personal Statements should be held in strict confidence. I would only allow people that you know and trust to help you because you know that they wouldn't be doing it for personal gain.
Side point: People willing to help on here may be genuine and have no personal gain to helping you by reading your PS, I am not trying to say they are not. But how do you know they will not use it to their own advantage?