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Am I using the colon correctly?

It was through X that I was first motivated to pursue medicine: a stark contrast to my early plans of Y.

Or should I be using a comma instead?

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It's definitely not a colon, but I'm about 95% sure a comma would work. Some other grammer nerd should verify though 🙂
 
I'm a fan of the hyphen
 
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lol i dont have my handbook lying around, and too lazy to search the interweb....but could using a semicolon work for ya?

It was through X that I was first motivated to pursue medicine; a stark contrast to my early plans of Y.
 
I think the semi colon would be appropriate..but could be wrong.
 
It was through X, a stark contrast to my early plans of Y, that I was first motivated to pursue medicine

or separate them into 2 sentences
 
I'm 100% certain a comma belongs there.

A comma goes any place you would pause for a beat when speaking, a colon goes before you list something, a semicolon only goes between two complete sentences that you want to link together.
 
Use a comma.

It was through X, a stark contrast to my early plans of Y, that I was first motivated to pursue medicine

or separate them into 2 sentences
Or write it like this (which I personally prefer).
 
Use a comma.


Or write it like this (which I personally prefer).

That couldn't make sense. X is an activity. Y is the thing that is a contrast to medicine (Y = underwater basketweaving).

I think I'm going to go with a comma. Thanks!
 
I'm a fan of the hyphen

So am I. A comma works, but a dash or a hyphen adds a nice emphatic touch. (Careful not to overdo it though).

Also, I'd switch your writing to the active voice.
 
So am I. A comma works, but a dash or a hyphen adds a nice emphatic touch. (Careful not to overdo it though).

Also, I'd switch your writing to the active voice.

I was first motivated to pursue medicine through x, a stark contrast to my early pursuits of Y.

works

My sick MCAT score - a start contrast to my early plans of not getting a sick MCAT score - motivated me to pursue medicine/
 
i'm with ksmi here. use a comma.

and fyi, y'all... hyphen =/= dash! what you're talking about is a dash. not a hyphen.
 
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I was first motivated to pursue medicine through x, a stark contrast to my early pursuits of Y.

works

My sick MCAT score - a start contrast to my early plans of not getting a sick MCAT score - motivated me to pursue medicine/

Are you commenting on my suggestion of the dash or the active voice? I can't tell.

Also, how can you fairly contrast those two sentences, if you haven't kept the subjects of the sentences consistent? The "sick MCAT score" story isn't really compelling, regardless if you use a dash or a comma.

Comma:
"I was first motivated to pursue medicine after getting a sick MCAT score, a stark contrast to my early pursuits of not getting a sick MCAT score."
 
I would only choose the dash if the examples of X and Y are really in "stark contrast" with each other, because the dash would emphasize that contrast. If the examples are only slightly antithetical, it won't be effective. But then, I would encourage you to change your word choice, since you were only being hyperbolic with "stark contrast" and not choosing precise language.
 
Am I using the colon correctly?

It was through X that I was first motivated to pursue medicine: a stark contrast to my early plans of Y.

Or should I be using a comma instead?

If you come to a difficult choice of what to use, then 9 times out of 10 you should just rewrite the sentence.

As for the other comments, you certainly could not use a semicolon, as this is solely for pasting together two complete yet related sentences. A hyphen is considered unprofessional. A comma requires a conjuncton and would not be appropriate. A colon is used to preface a list. Consider rewriting without use of the (awkward and undesirable) passive tense, something like the following.

"X first motivated me to pursue medicine, which stands in stark contrast to previous plans of Y."
 
A comma requires a conjuncton and would not be appropriate.

A comma only requires a conjunction when you're linking two clauses together. In this case, a comma would be both appropriate and correct.
 
all right, here's the deal.
Either a comma OR a hyphen will work.
But by reading that sentence, since it seems like a more "abrupt" change or addition of idea, you should use a hyphen. A comma is more subtle.
But remember: don't use too many hyphens in your PS or whatever you're writing, becase hyphens are very informal. Use them sparingly

NOTE:
Everyone here is calling it a hyphen. It is actually a dash. A hyphen is what you would put in between two words, like "friendly-looking". But what you want to use is a dash, which is "--". If you're writing this on word, the processor will recognise the "--" and connect them together into a long line/dash.
 
Quick question for farf, is Y in contrast to the field of medicine, or to X? If Y is in contrast to medicine, then your latter clause is an appositive and indeed requires a comma or a dash. Dashes are considered more informal so I'd stick to the comma as others have suggested.
 
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NOTE:
Everyone here is calling it a hyphen. It is actually a dash. A hyphen is what you would put in between two words, like "friendly-looking". But what you want to use is a dash, which is "--". If you're writing this on word, the processor will recognise the "--" and connect them together into a long line/dash.

yup, i said this earlier 🙄

i'm with ksmi here. use a comma.

and fyi, y'all... hyphen =/= dash! what you're talking about is a dash. not a hyphen.
 
yup, i said this earlier 🙄
Sorry, I just felt like reiterating it 😛
I still go with using a dash. We should start a poll. I'm curious.
 
The suggestion about switching to the active voice ("X motivated me" rather than "I was motivated by X") is probably the more important point here. It makes for clearer, more direct writing. If nothing else, it saves a few characters and provides a little bit of sentence variety if you find every line beginning with "I".

If you keep it as is, then a comma.

And as several people have pointed out, yes, it's more properly called a dash than a hyphen. Even more super-properly, as I learned it back at Our Mother of Perpetual Obligation, we're really talking about an em-dash (or m-dash or long dash) because back in typewriter days, it was the same width as the letter m, as opposed to an en-dash, which was the same width as the letter n. Since most typewriters didn't have an em-dash key, most writers just hit the hyphen key twice to indicate an em-dash. MS Word is kind enough to switch a -- to a single long dash, but since AMCAS doesn't, I'm right back to the good old days of hitting the hyphen twice.
 
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