success16

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Interesting story behind your personal statement. However, the first paragraph seems a bit "fluffy" lots of gooey adjectives and, (in my personal opinion) seems a bit falsified. In addition, I would advise you skim through this statement multiple times eliminating any grammatical errors which are present, as well as better word usage, "lady -> woman" for example.

Good Luck!