Running out of time, need some advice

[Ari1584]

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Okay so, i have re-written my PS AGAIN after having many editors that said my PS was not cohesive and did not meet the character limit (it was 1000 over, and needs to be 4500 for the DO limit). The main problems were that I did not have enough room for what I wanted to say. My initial essay opened with me discussing what I learned from 14 years of figure skating (hard work, commitment etc), talked about my major switch, then discussed patient interactions I had from working at a plastic surgeon's office. I also had a very interesting specific experience from the office.

I, myself, felt that essay seemed a little weird bc I essentially only talked about what I learned from working at the office and about skating. I never mentioned academics or anything else.

My second essay, I got rid of the skating thing, and opened with the specific experience I had with a patient. Then I went into working at the doc's office, then what I learned from volunteering as a youth mentor, then discussed my desire to be pushed academically. I wrapped up with talking about how grateful I was for the patient experience bc it reassured me to become a physician.

I think I have had too many editors and i am getting very torn with one person telling me they like one essay and one saying they like the other more. Is anyone willing to read both and just give me CONCRETE feedback on WHY one essay is better than the other? Or maybe which parts are stronger in one than the other? You don't have to fix grammer or anything, I am running out of time and need to submit before the middle of this week! I am just very frustrated and I havent even gotten to secondaries 🙁

 

[Blahblahologist]

I've sat through a lot of fiction writing workshops in my lifetime, which used to be endlessly frustrating to me-- three people say they loved this character and they wanted more; three say they hated him; three were confused by the character (but all in different ways); and two were disappointed that the story didn't include pictures.

Which is simply to say that more advice isn't necessarily better. The real trick for me was finding a two or so people who understood what I was trying to do and whose opinions I trusted. Listen to the comments that really make sense to you, and filter out the rest.

Though with your timeline, methinks this advice may not be all that helpful.

 

[Ari1584]

My problem is, the two people i have been asking the most are giving me COMPLETELY different advice. One says the essay is great and the other says its way too impersonal. Then one will say essay #2 is choppy and the other person says it flows much better. Who am i supposed to listen to?? 😕