I've been in correspondance with a relative (med student) who's been very successful with the app. process ... and he's been reading all my drafts and has been extremely helpful. However, a lot of my essay is showing without telling... or telling briefly. My "thesis statement" is very strong and extremely unique (according to him). However, he feels that by showing so much, I'm not telling enough. I have to tell enough to hammer my point in the reader's mind. He admits that it's unfortunate... but that's just how it works with adcomes who spend so little time reading essays. I can't simply show/describe my experiences and expect the adcom to understand the meaning from descriptions alone. To me, it seems a little redundant to keep hammering points 1) 2) and 3) over and over. But according to him, I really, REALLY have to. What do you guys think? What did you guys do?