Two different PS introductions, anyone would like to help me decide?

[johnwandering]

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I'm finished with my PS, but am just debating on two different introductions: a longer more "story-like intro" or a somewhat shorter one. They are basically the same story, but I remove all the "interesting bits" to generate the shorter introduction in an attempt to make it more interesting ( 😕 if that makes any sense...).

I'd much appreciate anyone who is willing to help me choose which one sounds more "interesting."

 

[ShenanigansMD]

get to the point as fast as you can, without leaving out important details

 

[altamont850]

PM the two options to me (if you're comfortable) and I'll read them.

 

[davidbm95]

I'm finished with my PS, but am just debating on two different introductions: a longer more "story-like intro" or a somewhat shorter one. They are basically the same story, but I remove all the "interesting bits" to generate the shorter introduction in an attempt to make it more interesting ( 😕 if that makes any sense...).

I'd much appreciate anyone who is willing to help me choose which one sounds more "interesting."

You can get a counselor to read both of them. They usually have good insight.