"Why DO" Secondary Help

[Ramspa]

Hello,

I am applying to DO schools for the first time and wrote my "Why DO" secondary. I wanted to inquire if anyone could take a quick look at it, to make sure that my points do emphasize that I am interested in Osteopathic medicine. The essay is 470 words.

Thank you in advance for any help or advise.

 

[Kumorebi]

Make sure your ECs back up whatever you emphasize in your essay!

 

[frosted2]

I know you posted this a while back, but I am interested in swapping essays on this same topic if you're willing!