Hey, I was just hoping for some feedback/help with the disadvantaged status essay. It's sort of weird talking about my family's financial status. This is what I have so far, any feedback is appreciated:
I grew up in a small, rural town in a single parent household living paycheck to paycheck. For 6 years, 3 of us lived cramped into 1 bedroom at my grandma’s house while my mom saved to buy us a home. As a teen, I remember that we would go to the food pantry for food and the thrift shop for clothes. Our area didn’t have a strong healthcare system, and the nearest ED was a 25 minute drive and was notorious for having long waits and poor quality care. I rarely saw my primary care physician, and I didn’t realize until I went to college that yearly physicals are for more than just student athletes. I remember that my mom once broke her finger so severely that it became deformed, but she never went to a doctor because she would rather save the money for any health emergencies that my brother or I might have had. Our financial troubles continued as I attended college, but I was able to earn scholarships toward my undergraduate degree. Now, I can say that I am the first in my immediate family to earn a Baccalaureate degree. My obstacles in life have given me countless opportunities for growth and broadened understanding, and I am proud of who I have become.
I grew up in a small, rural town in a single parent household living paycheck to paycheck. For 6 years, 3 of us lived cramped into 1 bedroom at my grandma’s house while my mom saved to buy us a home. As a teen, I remember that we would go to the food pantry for food and the thrift shop for clothes. Our area didn’t have a strong healthcare system, and the nearest ED was a 25 minute drive and was notorious for having long waits and poor quality care. I rarely saw my primary care physician, and I didn’t realize until I went to college that yearly physicals are for more than just student athletes. I remember that my mom once broke her finger so severely that it became deformed, but she never went to a doctor because she would rather save the money for any health emergencies that my brother or I might have had. Our financial troubles continued as I attended college, but I was able to earn scholarships toward my undergraduate degree. Now, I can say that I am the first in my immediate family to earn a Baccalaureate degree. My obstacles in life have given me countless opportunities for growth and broadened understanding, and I am proud of who I have become.