Advice on my personal statement

Started by joshwake
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joshwake

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I am looking for input anywhere I can get it. If anyone would like to give me some advice or simply provide an opinion please post and I will send you my personal statement. Thanks in advance!
 
sent it over, and again i would like to add that my grammar and writing is not good.. I will only comment on the ideas you have written.
 
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Feel free to PM it to me if you still need more feedback. I'll mainly focus on grammar and overall essay structure.

I've edited 35+ personal statements on SDN, so I can definitely give you an idea about where you stand in terms of originality (amongst the limited pool of essays I've seen).