I am looking for input anywhere I can get it. If anyone would like to give me some advice or simply provide an opinion please post and I will send you my personal statement. Thanks in advance!
Feel free to PM it to me if you still need more feedback. I'll mainly focus on grammar and overall essay structure.
I've edited 35+ personal statements on SDN, so I can definitely give you an idea about where you stand in terms of originality (amongst the limited pool of essays I've seen).