advice..please help

[sdnstud]

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i want to submit a letter along with my UCSF secondary. I need advice on how to start my letter.

Here is the story: i want to write a letter to tell the adcom that i have had experience working for UCSF. Specifically, I shadowed one of their drs for a year and I am working on a research project in collaboration with one of the professors there. HOwever, I really don't know how to start the letter. I don't want to say "i am writing to inform you that I have worked for your school and that's why you should accept me." I don't want to come off as an aszhole.

What do you think guys? What can i say if i want to be informative yet polite? thanks

 

[PookieGirl]

Is there an opportunity to write about research or work experience in the secondary? If yes, I would write about your experience there.

 

[drguy22]

Dear Adcom ,

firstly, I would like to thank you for considering my applicantion for the upcoming school year. I am very delighted to have a school with such high standards reviewing my application. It is for this very reason that I have worked with the school very closy throughout the years....blah blah blah..........
I feel that it is important for the adcom to know that I am not just trying to impress the commitee to gain an acceptance, but I wish to show them that I have loved this school for a very long time through my various projects and activities, which i feel should be taken into consideration when reviewing my file.

 

[Psycho Doctor]

Dear Adcom ,

firstly, I would like to thank you for considering my applicantion for the upcoming school year. I am very delighted to have a school with such high standards reviewing my application. It is for this very reason that I have worked with the school very closy throughout the years....blah blah blah..........
I feel that it is important for the adcom to know that I am not just trying to impress the commitee to gain an acceptance, but I wish to show them that I have loved this school for a very long time through my various projects and activities, which i feel should be taken into consideration when reviewing my file.

The first part was really good, but the end of it....once you make any mention of not trying to impress the committee makes it seem like just that....

 

[sdnstud]

hey everyone...how about this? please make any suggestions:

I am very pleased that my application for admission to the University of California, San Francisco School of Medicine has (or is it had?) been selected for further processing. Thank you for your time and consideration thus far. It is important that you have as complete a record as possible of my application before a final decision is made. For that reason, I take this opportunity to discuss my previous work with several professors at UCSF and keep you informed of my current activities.