Diversity, adversity, and challenge essay brainstorm feedback
Started by alpacalover2024
Prompts? Character/word limits?
1) I like it as a topic where you show curiosity about a topic that you don't know much about. After all, you're drawing from your academic studies, and I know a few schools ask you to disclose something you are curious about.
What makes you cool? Your academic minor? I think you can try harder.
2) I'm not a fan of assigning blame to your family members as sources of adversity. Maybe the first time you were confident enough to drive a car would be an impactful experience, but it just doesn't feel appropriate. I think you can talk in more general terms of the challenge of being in a multigenerational household -- which will make your answer sound less like blaming your grandmother for cancer.
3) Again, I'm not a fan of using family as a proxy for your failures. I don't think that failing to communicate with your grandfather meets the expectations of a failure that truly reflects on your professional abilities to process failure as a physician.
4) Is the challenge about being a phlebotomist? It's challenging but I don't think you're answering expectations. Again, I'd like to see your prompt.
1) I like it as a topic where you show curiosity about a topic that you don't know much about. After all, you're drawing from your academic studies, and I know a few schools ask you to disclose something you are curious about.
What makes you cool? Your academic minor? I think you can try harder.
2) I'm not a fan of assigning blame to your family members as sources of adversity. Maybe the first time you were confident enough to drive a car would be an impactful experience, but it just doesn't feel appropriate. I think you can talk in more general terms of the challenge of being in a multigenerational household -- which will make your answer sound less like blaming your grandmother for cancer.
3) Again, I'm not a fan of using family as a proxy for your failures. I don't think that failing to communicate with your grandfather meets the expectations of a failure that truly reflects on your professional abilities to process failure as a physician.
4) Is the challenge about being a phlebotomist? It's challenging but I don't think you're answering expectations. Again, I'd like to see your prompt.
