Not sure if you've seen this document, but it's an excellent compilation of successful personal statement examples:
here
I also echo much of the above advice. The goal of your personal statement is to convince a potential advisor that 1. you have a well-defined research interest that is a good fit for their expertise and current/future work and 2. you are capable of succeeding in grad school. As callous as it sounds, if you are writing sentences/paragraphs that do not speak to those two points, they are hurting your personal statement, even if they are personally meaningful. Personal statements are short documents, so every sentence counts.
I'd encourage you to really hone in your research interests (as
@psych.meout said above, what you have described so far is pretty broad). Is/are there specific disorder(s) you are interested in researching? Specific populations? Sociocultural factors? A few examples of appropriately specific research interests are something like protective factors against binge-eating behaviors in young adult women, impact of early life trauma on adolescent externalizing behaviors, and the influence of chronic illness on identity. These are all broad enough to generate a number of research questions, but specific enough to show direction. While research interests can change over time, people with a doctoral degree are generally experts in a narrow area, so advisors are looking for you to start defining this narrow area.
I'd also encourage looking at your past experiences through the lens of how they will make you a successful clinical psychology grad student. One thing I did was list out what I thought my strengths were, relate those to success in a grad program, then see how my experiences helped develop or highlight those strengths (e.g. I thrive when given independence and am self-driven. This allows me to be a better researcher because I can meet my research landmarks with less oversight and generate my own research questions. I can show this through (in addition to research examples) a history of developing self-initiated projects at old jobs and following them through to completion, along with success metrics of said projects). I don't come from a psychology background, so I strongly believe that you can leverage non-psychology experiences to success in applying to grad school, but you need to have a very cohesive narrative and clear communication of how your more unique life experiences have prepared you to be successful. The more different you are from the norm, the more it's on you to prove your value.
Good luck!!