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Hey SDN people,
I saw another thread that was posted recently with the intent of revising a personal statement and I saw a lot of great feedback. Since I want to make sure my PS is perfect, I figured SDN would be able to provide me with some constructive criticism. Also if this is some violation of board rules, would the mods do what needs to be done to this thread? So, below is my personal statement. Treat me as if you were an adcom. Thank you guys very much!
"-------I rolled my eyes for what must have been the millionth time. They were doing it again. Dad was standing idly by with a small grin on his face, and Mom was bragging to the neighbors about her son, future M.D. They were bringing up the story of Dr. David Ho, Time Magazines Man of the Year in 1996 as a prophecy of my own rise to greatness. Before I could blink, my mom had the magazine in hand and was flipping to the article on Dr. Ho. Sometimes I think she must carry a copy of that issue in her purse for the sole purpose of embarrassing me. I turned around and walked back into the house, shaking my head and muttering how weird my parents were. Even though Id known I wanted to be a doctor since I began volunteering in Medical City Dallas Hospital during my sophomore year of high school, I still had a lot to learn and a lot to experience. Looking back, I realize how little I knew about my intended profession and, more importantly, myself. Seeing as how this is my second time applying to medical school, Ive learned that having the potential to be a good medical school student is not enough; I need to remember that I have to prepare myself with the skills to be a good doctor because it is a lifetime commitment. It is my experiences in shadowing Dr. Kenneth Mathis, in a classroom seminar on international health topics, and my interaction with Vietnamese community through the Rice Vietnamese Student Association (VSA) that demonstrate my potential to be a good doctor.
-------Dr. Mathis, an orthopedic surgeon at the Baylor College of Medicine, showed me how to care for my patients in the future as a physician through his example while I was shadowing him. Patients would come into his clinic with fear and concern wrinkled in their faces, but when Dr. Mathis hands wrapped around the patients joints and massaged the joint, I could see the patients face cringing in pain melt into a smile and a laugh. I often left his clinic shaking my head and wondering how he did it. As I watched more closely, I saw that in each interaction, Dr. Mathis is able to question and answer on the patients condition while having friendly conversation about anything, from last weekend's fishing trip to the family's new puppy. He showed me that making a connection and building trust, which are essential for practicing medicine, are easier when the patient and doctor share common ground. Watching Dr. Mathis work, I fully realized for the first time, that I will one day be the doctor that will heal and cure this generation and generations past, literally holding the lives of these people in my hands. He taught me that being the best textbook practitioner is not enough; that to provide true care to patients as a doctor, my knowledge must not stop at medicine.
-------While the physician-patient interaction is essential in the practice of medicine, a focus on public health is also important for the improvement in the overall health of nations. In classroom seminar on international public health issues, I was challenged to open my mind and look at the big picture of healthcare. It is often said that about 15% of our population is uninsured, and therefore more money must go to providing coverage for those who are unable to pay for their medical expenses. Without being partisan, I believe that this money should be used to prevent the problems before they occur instead of playing catch-up. This means advocating public health and awareness of the most common and pressing diseases. It is this kind of thinking that I hope to further cultivate during my employment at the Houston Center for Quality of Care and Utilization Studies. Currently, I am working on a project that looks at the prevalence of peripheral vascular disease and the level of knowledge and awareness about the disease. While it is still in the early stages of the project, it seems as if there is a lack of knowledge and awareness about a disease that is a risk factor for ischemic heart disease, which has consistently been a leading cause of death in the United States.
-------All of this research and information done in public health would be useless without being able to convey it to the rest of the world. While there are ways to communicate the information gleaned from this research, I believe it is through the physician that information can be most effectively spread because physicians hold an esteemed position in our society. So I hope to strengthen and increase my current connections to my community that I have established during my years at Rice University. During my college years, I have been actively involved in the Rice VSA and through that involvement, I have made many ties with the Vietnamese community. One of these is with Anhlan Nguyen who works at the MD Anderson Cancer Center and is the director for the Vietnamese Culture and Science Association (VCSA). Each year, the VCSA conducts a series of anti-tobacco related events called the Tobacco Prevention Program. In this program, parents and children are educated about tobacco prevention in hopes of decreasing the prevalence of smoking-related diseases in the future. This is but one example of the benefits of community involvement that I will maintain a connection to the community as a physician.
-------Although following in the footsteps of Time's 1996 Man of the Year would satisfy my parents' expectations, I know what I truly want is to touch patients on a personal level like Dr. Mathis and help improve the overall state of health."
I saw another thread that was posted recently with the intent of revising a personal statement and I saw a lot of great feedback. Since I want to make sure my PS is perfect, I figured SDN would be able to provide me with some constructive criticism. Also if this is some violation of board rules, would the mods do what needs to be done to this thread? So, below is my personal statement. Treat me as if you were an adcom. Thank you guys very much!
"-------I rolled my eyes for what must have been the millionth time. They were doing it again. Dad was standing idly by with a small grin on his face, and Mom was bragging to the neighbors about her son, future M.D. They were bringing up the story of Dr. David Ho, Time Magazines Man of the Year in 1996 as a prophecy of my own rise to greatness. Before I could blink, my mom had the magazine in hand and was flipping to the article on Dr. Ho. Sometimes I think she must carry a copy of that issue in her purse for the sole purpose of embarrassing me. I turned around and walked back into the house, shaking my head and muttering how weird my parents were. Even though Id known I wanted to be a doctor since I began volunteering in Medical City Dallas Hospital during my sophomore year of high school, I still had a lot to learn and a lot to experience. Looking back, I realize how little I knew about my intended profession and, more importantly, myself. Seeing as how this is my second time applying to medical school, Ive learned that having the potential to be a good medical school student is not enough; I need to remember that I have to prepare myself with the skills to be a good doctor because it is a lifetime commitment. It is my experiences in shadowing Dr. Kenneth Mathis, in a classroom seminar on international health topics, and my interaction with Vietnamese community through the Rice Vietnamese Student Association (VSA) that demonstrate my potential to be a good doctor.
-------Dr. Mathis, an orthopedic surgeon at the Baylor College of Medicine, showed me how to care for my patients in the future as a physician through his example while I was shadowing him. Patients would come into his clinic with fear and concern wrinkled in their faces, but when Dr. Mathis hands wrapped around the patients joints and massaged the joint, I could see the patients face cringing in pain melt into a smile and a laugh. I often left his clinic shaking my head and wondering how he did it. As I watched more closely, I saw that in each interaction, Dr. Mathis is able to question and answer on the patients condition while having friendly conversation about anything, from last weekend's fishing trip to the family's new puppy. He showed me that making a connection and building trust, which are essential for practicing medicine, are easier when the patient and doctor share common ground. Watching Dr. Mathis work, I fully realized for the first time, that I will one day be the doctor that will heal and cure this generation and generations past, literally holding the lives of these people in my hands. He taught me that being the best textbook practitioner is not enough; that to provide true care to patients as a doctor, my knowledge must not stop at medicine.
-------While the physician-patient interaction is essential in the practice of medicine, a focus on public health is also important for the improvement in the overall health of nations. In classroom seminar on international public health issues, I was challenged to open my mind and look at the big picture of healthcare. It is often said that about 15% of our population is uninsured, and therefore more money must go to providing coverage for those who are unable to pay for their medical expenses. Without being partisan, I believe that this money should be used to prevent the problems before they occur instead of playing catch-up. This means advocating public health and awareness of the most common and pressing diseases. It is this kind of thinking that I hope to further cultivate during my employment at the Houston Center for Quality of Care and Utilization Studies. Currently, I am working on a project that looks at the prevalence of peripheral vascular disease and the level of knowledge and awareness about the disease. While it is still in the early stages of the project, it seems as if there is a lack of knowledge and awareness about a disease that is a risk factor for ischemic heart disease, which has consistently been a leading cause of death in the United States.
-------All of this research and information done in public health would be useless without being able to convey it to the rest of the world. While there are ways to communicate the information gleaned from this research, I believe it is through the physician that information can be most effectively spread because physicians hold an esteemed position in our society. So I hope to strengthen and increase my current connections to my community that I have established during my years at Rice University. During my college years, I have been actively involved in the Rice VSA and through that involvement, I have made many ties with the Vietnamese community. One of these is with Anhlan Nguyen who works at the MD Anderson Cancer Center and is the director for the Vietnamese Culture and Science Association (VCSA). Each year, the VCSA conducts a series of anti-tobacco related events called the Tobacco Prevention Program. In this program, parents and children are educated about tobacco prevention in hopes of decreasing the prevalence of smoking-related diseases in the future. This is but one example of the benefits of community involvement that I will maintain a connection to the community as a physician.
-------Although following in the footsteps of Time's 1996 Man of the Year would satisfy my parents' expectations, I know what I truly want is to touch patients on a personal level like Dr. Mathis and help improve the overall state of health."