PS 1 v. PS 2

[daisy12345]

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I have written two polished copies of my personal statement and I feel like I’m conflicted about which one is “better.” Both of them start out with how i became interested in medicine and are essentially the same. Towards the middle, PS 2 frames the essay into specifically why I want to become a doctor - bringing care to underserved communities. I talk about my research and two experiences working with Chinese older adults and the language barriers they encounter one in the nonclinical setting the other in the clinical. PS 1 mentions one experience working with Chinese older adults and then talks about a time I worked at the hospital and noticed something amiss with a patient.

I feel the issue with PS 1 is that it’s not connected and just a bunch of experiences meshed together. Why I’m not completely set with PS 2 is that I worry that the experiences I talk about feel overlapped. I did try to focus on different aspects of the experiences though. Thoughts?

 

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I would choose the one with the most variety of experiences. You can move any repeating of the same experiences to the MME section of your activities or save it for secondaries

 

[pablo213]

I have written two polished copies of my personal statement and I feel like I’m conflicted about which one is “better.” Both of them start out with how i became interested in medicine and are essentially the same. Towards the middle, PS 2 frames the essay into specifically why I want to become a doctor - bringing care to underserved communities. I talk about my research and two experiences working with Chinese older adults and the language barriers they encounter one in the nonclinical setting the other in the clinical. PS 1 mentions one experience working with Chinese older adults and then talks about a time I worked at the hospital and noticed something amiss with a patient.

I feel the issue with PS 1 is that it’s not connected and just a bunch of experiences meshed together. Why I’m not completely set with PS 2 is that I worry that the experiences I talk about feel overlapped. I did try to focus on different aspects of the experiences though. Thoughts?

I think PS2 is better based on what you have written as long as the research is relevant to health disparities or the like. There should be some overlap since they are addressing similar issues. Maybe expand the nonclinical to cover other social determinants of health.

 

[daisy12345]

I think PS2 is better based on what you have written as long as the research is relevant to health disparities or the like. There should be some overlap since they are addressing similar issues. Maybe expand the nonclinical to cover other social determinants of health.

Thank you for your feedback! The non clinical one focuses on how I translated health information from English to mandarin and led workshops. It touches on how language could be a barrier to health literacy. The clinical one is more about how I worked with his medical team to translate how he was feeling during his stay, more about empathy and patience. Im wondering if that’s enough distinction between the two?