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Still hoping to get some feedback on my PS. I would really appreciate any comments anyone would have time to give, even if minimal.
I felt more connected to my original draft, but I received the feedback that it was more tell-y and less show-y. I geared the latest draft towards an attempt at being more show-y, but in ways I feel it is more contrived now. Kind of at a point where I am not sure which direction to go with it. Please message me if you could help! Again, definitely would exchange and give feedback as well!
I felt more connected to my original draft, but I received the feedback that it was more tell-y and less show-y. I geared the latest draft towards an attempt at being more show-y, but in ways I feel it is more contrived now. Kind of at a point where I am not sure which direction to go with it. Please message me if you could help! Again, definitely would exchange and give feedback as well!
