I agree with everything that
plsletmein said.
My suggested revisions:
Dear Dr. X,
My name is X and I am currently a sophomore at X majoring in Human Biology.
I have a very keen interest in medicine and hope to attend medical school after I graduate. (delete this and in its place reference a project that the PI is working on- or an area of their research that interests you if you can not identify what their active projects are just from the information online- and briefly remark on why it is interesting to you- the best students are those who are intrinsically intrigued by the research topic and invested in the project's advancements and not using the experience as an instrument to further their own medical careers ) ****I am currently looking to identify a research project that I could
regularly contribute to for the
remainder of my undergraduate career (make sure that he/she knows this because PIs often weigh the cost/benefits of taking on another undergraduate-if you require more training/direction than the benefits they would derive from your long term contributions- they are unlikely to be inviting). In addition to possessing a variety of specific skills that are likely to be of benefit to a research project (data collection, B, C- if you can, try to list a few more, even if they are not directly related to medicine/research but are attributes/skills that enable you to excel in other areas), I am able to take on any responsibilities that would enable the project to proceed more efficiently. (something to this effect- sell yourself) I am an exceptionally quick learner, am enthusiastic about excelling in everything that I commit myself to, and always find new ways of making dynamic and productive contributions to a work environment (I reworked this because your wording created the impression that they would be doing you a favor by providing you an opportunity-which although is the case- by focusing on it in the way you have it might make them think they will be giving more time/energy to you as opposed to you contributing to them...). If you are aware of any research projects that might be an appropriate fit for what I am looking for, I am able to start (provide date). Additionally, I am available to meet further to discuss any opportunities that might exist including what role I would be able to play. (and- if this doesn't work- I agree- find out where their offices are located and speak with them directly). AND SEND THIS E-MAIL TO MANY DIFFERENT PIS BUT MAKE SURE TO REVISE THE RESEARCH PROJECT YOU ARE REFERENCING AND YOUR INTEREST IN IT*
Sincerely,
X
Hi Dr.X my name is X and I'm currently a rising
sophomore at X. I am majoring in Human Biology, I have a very keen
interest in medicine and hope to attend medical school after I graduate. I
wanted to ask and see if you would allow an undergraduate student like
myself to help you with your research this year when school starts, I can
help out in any way needed like maintaining the lab, collecting data,etc.
I don't have much experience but I am very interested in the research you
are conducting and I am willing to learn whatever needed to prove myself
useful in your lab. I believe this opportunity would be a powerful asset
to me on my quest to medical school and I'm always excited to learn new
things. If there is any way you can get one more undergrad in your lab I
would be very grateful! Thank you very much for taking time out of your
busy schedule to read my e-mail and I would be extremely grateful if you
provided me with this opportunity!
