Secondary setback/obstacle essays

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Hi guys, long-time lurker here, but finally decided to post because I am having a really tough time deciding what to write about for the secondaries that ask me to describe a setback in my life, and how I overcame it or what it taught me.

Here are my two options:
1) Moving to the US at the age of 9, not knowing any English and facing major culture shock. Many people I asked for advice have been pushing me to write about this, but I don't really know how exactly. It only took a few months for me to adjust and speak English fluently, and now this story seems like a thing of the past. I mean sure, it was really hard and I cried in class for weeks, but I'm not sure how I would go about describing what I did to overcome it, or what went through my head besides the inital shock and stress. After all, I was just a child.

Personally I think this experience does have many positive qualities that medical schools would appreciate - moving to a completely new environment where I did not even speak the language, and quickly adjusting so well that people were surprised to find out I had only recently moved from a different country. But it is the transition between those two phases that I am having difficulty explaining, because it was at a young age.

2) My mother got diagnosed with breast cancer when I was a sophomore in college and had to undergo surgery and chemotherapy. She is fine now, but this was by far the most unexpected and difficult event I had to deal with in the more recent past. However I'm nervous to write about it because I don't want it to come off like a sob story where I'm looking for sympathy. I also don't want to come off as "weak," something others have warned me about when writing about such personal topics. For instance, I did get poor grades around that time but I do not want it to be connected with the circumstances. Instead, I would want to discuss how I dealt with such an emotional ordeal without letting it consume my life. While I could not help being upset or worried often, I knew I had to remain composed, realistic, and most importantly positive.

I would realllllly appreciate any input you guys have on which topic I should write about, and why. I've been putting saving the applications with this question for last, and I cannot put them off any longer. Thanks!

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Hi guys, long-time lurker here, but finally decided to post because I am having a really tough time deciding what to write about for the secondaries that ask me to describe a setback in my life, and how I overcame it or what it taught me.

Here are my two options:
1) Moving to the US at the age of 9, not knowing any English and facing major culture shock. Many people I asked for advice have been pushing me to write about this, but I don't really know how exactly. It only took a few months for me to adjust and speak English fluently, and now this story seems like a thing of the past. I mean sure, it was really hard and I cried in class for weeks, but I'm not sure how I would go about describing what I did to overcome it, or what went through my head besides the inital shock and stress. After all, I was just a child.

Personally I think this experience does have many positive qualities that medical schools would appreciate - moving to a completely new environment where I did not even speak the language, and quickly adjusting so well that people were surprised to find out I had only recently moved from a different country. But it is the transition between those two phases that I am having difficulty explaining, because it was at a young age.

2) My mother got diagnosed with breast cancer when I was a sophomore in college and had to undergo surgery and chemotherapy. She is fine now, but this was by far the most unexpected and difficult event I had to deal with in the more recent past. However I'm nervous to write about it because I don't want it to come off like a sob story where I'm looking for sympathy. I also don't want to come off as "weak," something others have warned me about when writing about such personal topics. For instance, I did get poor grades around that time but I do not want it to be connected with the circumstances. Instead, I would want to discuss how I dealt with such an emotional ordeal without letting it consume my life. While I could not help being upset or worried often, I knew I had to remain composed, realistic, and most importantly positive.

I would realllllly appreciate any input you guys have on which topic I should write about, and why. I've been putting saving the applications with this question for last, and I cannot put them off any longer. Thanks!
Try to intercalate one with the other. They both are really interesting stories I would like to hear more about!
 
Hi guys, long-time lurker here, but finally decided to post because I am having a really tough time deciding what to write about for the secondaries that ask me to describe a setback in my life, and how I overcame it or what it taught me.

Here are my two options:
1) Moving to the US at the age of 9, not knowing any English and facing major culture shock. Many people I asked for advice have been pushing me to write about this, but I don't really know how exactly. It only took a few months for me to adjust and speak English fluently, and now this story seems like a thing of the past. I mean sure, it was really hard and I cried in class for weeks, but I'm not sure how I would go about describing what I did to overcome it, or what went through my head besides the inital shock and stress. After all, I was just a child.

Personally I think this experience does have many positive qualities that medical schools would appreciate - moving to a completely new environment where I did not even speak the language, and quickly adjusting so well that people were surprised to find out I had only recently moved from a different country. But it is the transition between those two phases that I am having difficulty explaining, because it was at a young age.

2) My mother got diagnosed with breast cancer when I was a sophomore in college and had to undergo surgery and chemotherapy. She is fine now, but this was by far the most unexpected and difficult event I had to deal with in the more recent past. However I'm nervous to write about it because I don't want it to come off like a sob story where I'm looking for sympathy. I also don't want to come off as "weak," something others have warned me about when writing about such personal topics. For instance, I did get poor grades around that time but I do not want it to be connected with the circumstances. Instead, I would want to discuss how I dealt with such an emotional ordeal without letting it consume my life. While I could not help being upset or worried often, I knew I had to remain composed, realistic, and most importantly positive.

I would realllllly appreciate any input you guys have on which topic I should write about, and why. I've been putting saving the applications with this question for last, and I cannot put them off any longer. Thanks!

The key to writing a good essay is for you to be comfortable with the topic and know why you're writing it. While either of these events sound like they can work for that essay topic, you seem much more comfortable using #2, so I would go with that. It also is something that you dealt with as an adult, so more relevant to the implied point of these essay topics--which is roughly 'show us that when you encounter difficulties in medical school, you aren't going to collapse like a house of cards in a strong breeze'.
 
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Personally I don't think that overcoming a challenge as a 9 year old really says anything about you now. It was an important part of your life, but happened so long ago that I would want a comparable more recent event to show how that same strength is still there.

I certainly think that the second topic is a valid one, as are your concerns about it being a sob story. I would focus on how you analyzed the situation and developed a method to cope. What happened the first time you tried to study with the news hanging over your head? How did you resolve the conflict to allow you to both study and provide emotional support? What are the lessons you got from the experience and how are they applicable challenges? This way you really don't talk about the actual illness too much and really are centering on your own self analysis. Ideally, you can end the essay by transitioning from the past to the future and talk about balance of work and personal responsibilities. Essentially you are showing the reader that you have faced something difficult, describe the development of a coping mechanism, and assert that this skill will help you in medical school.
 
I wrote about being an immigrant from Mexico at the age of 5, living in an underserved community, growing up poor, etc. If you can add other things besides just having trouble with English that would make your obstacles more significant.

I wrote about being undocumented in Loyola secondary since they are for undocumented students. I didnt speak of that in my other secondaries.
 
Try to intercalate one with the other. They both are really interesting stories I would like to hear more about!

I will think about that idea, but I think it would be difficult to discuss both, especially with limits as short as 250 words.

The key to writing a good essay is for you to be comfortable with the topic and know why you're writing it. While either of these events sound like they can work for that essay topic, you seem much more comfortable using #2, so I would go with that. It also is something that you dealt with as an adult, so more relevant to the implied point of these essay topics--which is roughly 'show us that when you encounter difficulties in medical school, you aren't going to collapse like a house of cards in a strong breeze'.

I agree that I feel more comfortable with #2 so I will probably go with that one. I'll keep that last quote in mind too.

Personally I don't think that overcoming a challenge as a 9 year old really says anything about you now. It was an important part of your life, but happened so long ago that I would want a comparable more recent event to show how that same strength is still there.

I certainly think that the second topic is a valid one, as are your concerns about it being a sob story. I would focus on how you analyzed the situation and developed a method to cope. What happened the first time you tried to study with the news hanging over your head? How did you resolve the conflict to allow you to both study and provide emotional support? What are the lessons you got from the experience and how are they applicable challenges? This way you really don't talk about the actual illness too much and really are centering on your own self analysis. Ideally, you can end the essay by transitioning from the past to the future and talk about balance of work and personal responsibilities. Essentially you are showing the reader that you have faced something difficult, describe the development of a coping mechanism, and assert that this skill will help you in medical school.

Thank you for the great writing pointers about my topic, I appreciate it!
I wrote about being an immigrant from Mexico at the age of 5, living in an underserved community, growing up poor, etc. If you can add other things besides just having trouble with English that would make your obstacles more significant.

I wrote about being undocumented in Loyola secondary since they are for undocumented students. I didnt speak of that in my other secondaries.

Seems like you had a lot of other troubles with immigration here.. I personally didn't, or maybe it just didn't affect me that much when I was little. So I don't think I could write about my experience as well as you did.
 
I would realllllly appreciate any input you guys have on which topic I should write about,
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OP, write about the second one. The first experience is better suited for a diversity essay.
 
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