Trying not to sound presumptuous on an AMCAS activity description, advice welcomed

[M.MD]

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I'm putting the finishing touches on my application and have a quick question about wording for a particular activity. I was a caregiver for two years (basically hospice) and it was very meaningful to me. In the description, I wrote: "I felt as though I had briefly glimpsed into the inner workings of the doctor-patient relationship..." Does this sentence sound presumptuous or a little naive? I don't want to come across as though I know what the doctor-patient relationship is like, but I did learn a whole lot from that experience, and I was heavily involved in the caregiving process. Maybe I'm just over-thinking it, but I would appreciate any last minute advice. Thank you.

Here is the original compared to the 2 replacement sentences I've been considering:

1. "I felt as though I had briefly glimpsed into the inner workings of the doctor-patient relationship..."
2. "I briefly felt what it might be like to experience the doctor-patient relationship..."
3. "I felt as though I had briefly touched on the meaning of the doctor-patient relationship..."

 

[el_duderino]

How about "I gained insight into the doctor-patient relationship" and following it up with an example.

 

[M.MD]

How about "I gained insight into the doctor-patient relationship" and following it up with an example.

I actually like that better than what I had, thanks!